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Advantages and disadvantages of long working hours

Advantages and disadvantages of long working hours 0A89Q
Numerous amount of people fill in for long working hours and as a circumstance, they will not have much free time left. I believe the negative effects outweigh the positive ones which I will explain comprehensively in the following: Firstly, extra hours will evidently result in more income since the law of employment governs it. Secondly, in most cases, when an employee works for, extra he/she could improve drastically in his/her line of work, which can be either faster results, more detailed solutions, etc. This can evidently lead to managers’ satisfactory, promotions and raise. For instance, one of my relatives who works in a pharmaceutical has achieved huge amounts of promotions in very little time just by outworking nearly all of his colleagues and seniors. Finally, the harder an employee commits, the more he/she becomes involved and greater levels of involvement can translate to becoming more influential in the work place and gaining more importance as an individual in the occupation. However, committing to long shifts and hours in the workplace have extreme disadvantages as well. Firstly, personal life is largely dependent on how much time one spends after work. working for long shits can severely danger ones’ personal life and relationships. Secondly, continuous exhaustions are often seen when one works more the usual. For example, when a father spends most of his time working, in most scenarios it means he would not be able to provide his children with his presence and eventually this can result in children lacking the fatherhood qualities. Finally, I believe longer hours will naturally result in a person becoming increasingly attached to his job and being detached from all else therefor in case the employee has to leave his/her occupation, this can become a devastating and life-wrecking situation. In conclusion, despite the all the benefits of long working hours, I consider the negative reviewed points much more impactful and thus it lets me to believe the positive effects are out-drafting the negative ones.
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and as a circumstance, they will not have much free
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left
. I believe the
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negative
effects outweigh the
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positive
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which I will
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explain
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Firstly
, extra
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will
evidently
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result
in more income since the law of employment governs it.
Secondly
,
in most cases
, when an employee works for, extra he/she could
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improve
drastically
in his/her line of
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work
, which can be either faster
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results
, more detailed solutions, etc. This can
evidently
lead to managers’ satisfactory, promotions and raise.
For instance
, one of my relatives who
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works
in a pharmaceutical has achieved huge amounts of promotions in
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by outworking
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all of his colleagues and seniors.
Finally
, the harder an employee commits, the more he/she becomes involved and greater levels of involvement can translate to becoming more influential in the
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work
place and gaining more importance as an individual in the occupation.

However
, committing to
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long
shifts and
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in the workplace have extreme disadvantages
as well
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, personal life is
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one spends after
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work
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for
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shits
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ones’
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when one works more the usual.
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, when a father spends most of his
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working
, in most scenarios it means he would not be able to provide his children with his presence and
eventually
this can
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result
in children lacking the fatherhood qualities.
Finally
, I believe longer
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hours
will
naturally
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in a person becoming
increasingly
attached to his job and
being detached
from all else therefor in case the employee
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has to
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his/her occupation, this can become a devastating and life-wrecking situation.

In conclusion
, despite the all the benefits of
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, I consider the
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reviewed points much more impactful and
thus
it
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lets
me to believe the
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effects are out-drafting the
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IELTS essay Advantages and disadvantages of long working hours

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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