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Advances in biotechnology, such as genetically modified food (GMF) and cloning, are seen by some as interfering with nature and an attempt by certain governments to control world food supplies. To what extent do you believe this to be true? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Advances in biotechnology, such as genetically modified food (GMF) and cloning, are seen by some as interfering with nature and an attempt by certain governments to control world food supplies. Q2kOw
There is rapid development in technology, making our life much more convenient than before. However, government attempts to take advantage of those technologies in order to control food supplies. From my point of view, I advocate the usage of technology to modify and utilise food storage. This essay will examine the positive aspects of using biotechnology in food. To begin with, It is undeniable that if the modification in food occurs, it could potentially take a longer time for food to become spoiled, which means convenient stores or mass markets don't necessarily need to get rid of spoiled products frequently. To illustrate, there could be a type of fruit that merely has a short shelf-live, and therefore market's revenue is likely to be lower than what they expected. In addition, genetically modified food means the scientist has to interfere with the DNA sequences inside the nucleus, which means scientist is allowed to adjust DNA sequences to serve their desire. For instance, scientists can modify the crops to become resistant to the particular pests on the farm, which make severe damage to the food. What is more, if the government attempt to clone those foods, it could bring about several beneficial benefits. One clear example is that if we are able to clone the food, it means that government can invariably increase the food supplies as much as they want, (and) ending the problem of inadequate food and starving in poor countries. To conclude, although food modification goes against nature and plant evolution, it could bring about unprecedented phenomenon if the action of modification is taken, and therefore we should devote to consider do the positive aspects outweigh possible negative consequences or not.
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However
,
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government
attempts to take advantage of those technologies in order to control
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food
supplies. From my point of view, I advocate the usage of technology to modify and
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food
storage. This essay will examine the
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positive
aspects of using biotechnology in food.

To
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begin
with, It is undeniable that if the modification in
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food
occurs, it could
potentially
take a longer time for
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food
to become spoiled, which
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means
convenient stores or mass markets don't
necessarily
need to
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get
rid of spoiled products
frequently
. To illustrate, there could be a type of fruit that
merely
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live
, and
therefore
market's revenue is likely to be lower than what they
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expected
.

In addition
,
genetically
modified
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food
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means
the scientist
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has to
interfere with the DNA sequences inside the nucleus, which
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means
scientist is
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allowed
to adjust DNA sequences to serve their desire.
For instance
, scientists can modify the crops to become resistant to the particular pests on the farm, which
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make
severe damage to the
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food
.
What is more
, if the
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government
attempt to clone those
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foods
, it could bring about several beneficial benefits. One
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clear
example is that if we are able to clone the
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food
, it
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means
that
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government
can
invariably
increase the
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food
supplies as much as they want, (and) ending the problem of inadequate
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food
and starving in poor countries.

To conclude
, although
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food
modification goes against nature and plant evolution, it could bring about unprecedented phenomenon if the action of modification
is taken
, and
therefore
we should devote to consider do the
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positive
aspects outweigh possible
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consequences or not.
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IELTS essay Advances in biotechnology, such as genetically modified food (GMF) and cloning, are seen by some as interfering with nature and an attempt by certain governments to control world food supplies.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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