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Ads provide good information or not?

Ads provide good information or not? XG3WO
The companies invest a large amount of money on advertisment for convincing people to buy their products. Nowadays it is commonly accepted that advertisment make people misleading about the real quality of products. Contrary to this belief there are still those who argue that ads can provide some useful information for customers. However, I am inclinde to believe that they only focus on perciving people to buy goods using many unfair methods. First aspect to point out is that advertises only show the advantages and positive aspects. When you see an advertise which speak honestly about the quality of a product? The major strategies which are used in most of them are including exagarating the strenghten and hidding the weaknesses of products, so only the reality of one aspect of a product is explained not the others. In some cases, they used famous actors, athlets to convice people about the qaulity of their products or may repeat a sentences again and again in order to be penetrated to mind of consumers. Another significant point which should be taken in to consideration is that they do not tell real prices and try to show it as less as possible. The advertisements try to attract the attention of consumers by expressing some good but not real prices for products which is not covered all amount of them. Indeed, most of products such as cars, TVs, computers, cell phones include extra cost which consumers should pay for them and if they do not accept this additional cost, the companies do not sell products. For example, the samsung company add ten percent of TV's price for warranty, While it is not included in the advertisments of this TVs. Finally yet importantly, the products was introduced in facsinating nice environment in advertises. People always like to be very rich and advertisenments take advantages from this interest of people in luxurious houses, cars, cities, resturants and show their products approperiate for rich people. Therefore, this kind of environment make people less confident and force them to buy products since rich people use this kind of products in advertises. However, they are good-for-nothing. Based on the above- mentioned points, I am covinced that we should never ever believe the statments of advertises. Focusing on the positive points and using luxurious place can be intorduced as some techniques which give wronge feeling to people about the reality of products and it is clear that people should not believe the fake prices in ads. Who can select right based on the advices of ads?
The
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companies
invest a large amount of money on
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advertisment
for convincing
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people
to
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buy
their
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products
. Nowadays it is
commonly
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accepted
that
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advertisment
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make
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people
misleading about the real quality of
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products
. Contrary to this belief there are
still
those who argue that ads can provide
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some
useful information for customers.
However
, I am
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inclinde
to believe that they
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only
focus on
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perciving
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people
to
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buy
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goods
using
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many
unfair methods.

First
aspect to
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point
out is that
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advertises
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only
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show
the advantages and
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positive
aspects. When you
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see
an
The word 'advertise' is a verb. Did you mean the noun "advertisement"?
advertise
which speak
honestly
about the quality of a
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product
? The major strategies which are
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used
in most of them are including
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exagarating
the
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strenghten
and
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hidding
the weaknesses of
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products
,
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so
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only
the reality of one aspect of a
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product
is
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explained
not the others. In
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some
cases, they
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used
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famous
actors,
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athlets
to
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convice
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people
about the
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qaulity
of their
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products
or may repeat
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a sentences
again and again in order to
be penetrated
to mind of consumers.

Another significant
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point
which should
be taken
in to consideration is that they do not
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tell
real
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prices
and try to
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show
it as
Did you mean "less", "little"?
less
Comparison requires "than", not 'then' nor 'as'.
as
possible. The advertisements try to attract the attention of consumers by expressing
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some
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good
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but
not real
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prices
for
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products
which is not covered all amount of them.
Indeed
, most of
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products
such as cars, TVs, computers, cell phones include extra cost which consumers should pay for them and if they do not accept this additional cost, the
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companies
do not sell
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products
.
For example
, the
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samsung
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company
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add
ten percent of TV's
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price
for warranty, While it is not included in the
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advertisments
of this TVs.

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Finally
yet
importantly
, the
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products
was introduced
in
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facsinating
nice environment in
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advertises
.
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People
always like to be
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very
rich and
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advertisenments
take advantages from this interest of
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people
in luxurious
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houses
, cars, cities,
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resturants
and
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show
their
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products
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approperiate
for rich
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people
.
Therefore
, this kind of environment
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make
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people
less confident and force them to
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buy
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products
since rich
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people
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use
this kind of
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products
in
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advertises
.
However
, they are
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good
-for-nothing.

Based on the above- mentioned
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points
, I am
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covinced
that we should never ever believe the
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statments
of
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advertises
. Focusing on the
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positive
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points
and using luxurious place can be
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intorduced
as
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some
techniques which give
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wronge
feeling to
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people
about the reality of
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products
and it is
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clear
that
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people
should not believe the fake
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prices
in ads. Who can select right based on the advices of ads?
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IELTS essay Ads provide good information or not?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
425 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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