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In addition to being recreational, museums are considered educational places that are very useful for people and society. However, these days, most of them are not free and visitors must purchase a ticket to enter. Although this phenomenon can have negative aspects, I think its positive sides are far more. It is obvious that receiving admission charges by museums will discourage people from visiting these cultural places. People's reluctance to visit these instructive places not only has a significant impact on reducing the level of historical and cultural knowledge of the community, but also threatens their continued activities. Managing and continuing the activities of these places becomes very difficult and sometimes impossible due to the maintenance costs due to the absence of visitors or their very low presence. On the other hand, despite aforementioned disadvantages, I believe that it offers more advantages compared to its disadvantages. One of the most important aspects of admission charges is that museums can provide more facilities for visitors. In this way, not only do museums benefit from the presence of more and more people, but also people become more willing to visit these places. Moreover, museums that receive money, greatly reduce the concern of lack of budget to cover their initial expenses. They can easily manage to pay their bills, update their equipment or repair them if needed an etc. Also, by using their revenue, these museums can improve their exhibits and keep them always clean and good-looking. As a personal experience, I have learnt that most museums, which receive payment, offer a far more attractive and orderly environment and at the same time more informative details. To sum up, admission costs have advantages and disadvantages. They can have negative effects such as people not wanting to visit such places and jeopardizing their activities, and they can also have benefits such as providing more services to visitors and a better quality environment.
In addition
to being recreational,
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museums
are considered
educational
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places
that are
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very
useful for
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people
and society.
However
, these days, most of them are not free and
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visitors
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must
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purchase
a ticket to enter. Although this phenomenon can have
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negative
aspects, I
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think
its
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positive
sides are far more.

It is obvious that receiving admission charges by
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museums
will discourage
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people
from visiting these cultural
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places
.
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People
's reluctance to visit these instructive
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places
not
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only
has a significant impact on reducing the level of historical and cultural knowledge of the community,
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but
also
threatens their continued activities. Managing and continuing the activities of these
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places
becomes
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very
difficult and
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sometimes
impossible due to the maintenance costs due to the absence of
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visitors
or their
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very
low presence.

On the other hand
, despite aforementioned disadvantages, I believe that it offers more advantages compared to its disadvantages. One of the most
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important
aspects of admission charges is that
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museums
can provide more facilities for
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visitors
. In this way, not
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only
do
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museums
benefit from the presence of more and more
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people
,
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but
also
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people
become more willing to visit these places.

Moreover
,
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museums
that receive money,
greatly
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reduce
the concern of lack of budget to cover their initial expenses. They can
easily
manage to pay their bills, update their equipment or repair them if needed an etc.
Also
, by using their revenue, these
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museums
can
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improve
their exhibits and
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keep
them always clean and
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good
-looking. As a personal experience, I have
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learnt
that most
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museums
, which receive payment, offer a far more attractive and orderly environment and at the same time more informative
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details
.

To sum up, admission costs have advantages and disadvantages. They can have
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negative
effects such as
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people
not wanting to visit such
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places
and jeopardizing their activities, and they can
also
have benefits such as providing more services to
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visitors
and a better quality environment.
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IELTS essay admission charges for museums

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
318 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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