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Access To the internet enables young people to achieve educational and work related goals more easily. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Access To the internet enables young people to achieve educational and work related goals more easily. bOmkW

People hold different viewpoints about the benefits of the internet, among which, there is a general assumption that access to the internet enables young people to achieve educational and work related goals more easily. From my perspective, I tend to partly agree with this viewpoint. To some extent, I agree with the idea above for some reasons. The internet has much information, which helps everyone finds job or scholarship more opportunities when there is no internet. Besides, on the internet, we just need to click the mouse which ability search a lot of necessary knowledge to support for work. For example, the applications help to study from distance or aided design which achieve educational and work-related goals more easily. However, there are also a number of factors explaining why I do not completely agree with the viewpoint. There is a study that has shown that it takes a young person 4 hours a day to access the internet. One of the explanations is that access to the internet causes young people to lose concentration on their goals as they tend to be swept into loads of entertaining sources online such as games or social networks. Additionally, when people use the internet a lot, it will affect the physical and mental health of a young person. Like, in the social, more young people are sight impairment and socially isolated. In conclusion, as explained earlier, I partly agree with this idea as the internet has much information and knowledge. It is my prediction that access to the internet enables young people to achieve educational and work related goals more easily

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