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abouy hobby that you enjoy now

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I have never really been short of hobbies as I always like to try new and interesting things. But one particular hobby, which has stuck with me more or less always, is listening to music. Yes, I love listening to music – all kinds of music – pretty much all the time, unless, of course, I am sleeping. This hobby was passed down from my parents, who let me listen to music before I was born. By the way, this hobby has followed me for the past 18 years. Anyway, I get a number of benefits from this hobby. The first benefit, of course, is that it makes me feel happy and glad while getting rid of my frustration and worries about life. Besides, it also helps me understand my life and its goal in a larger frame of the present, past, and future. Finally, it also stimulates my mind and body to accomplish more in life.
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, which has stuck with me more or less always, is listening to
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. Yes, I
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all kinds of
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pretty much all the time, unless,
of course
, I am sleeping. This
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hobby
was passed
down from my parents, who
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music
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before
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was born
. By the way, this
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hobby
has followed me for the past 18 years. Anyway, I
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get
a number of benefits from this
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hobby
. The
first
benefit,
of course
, is that it
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makes
me feel happy and glad while getting rid of my frustration and worries about life.
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, it
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helps
me understand my life and its goal in a larger frame of the present, past, and future.
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, it
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stimulates my mind and body to accomplish more in life.
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IELTS essay abouy hobby that you enjoy now

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  American English
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