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About wild animals life this condition leads to the death of the animals

About wild animals life this condition leads to the death of the animals J06V5
I saw 11 years old at the time. One day we went to zoo. I saw lions, tigers and other wild animals. It is very great and interesting. It is prefer to watch tv in home. I stepped of the boat and i saw crocodile. It is very fierce wild animals. I really liked this zoo. You can see wild animals in forest. If you live in city, you will go to zoo and you can see wild animals. A lot of wild animals live in America, Africa and Australia. If you can see fierce animals, you may be afraid. Becouse they are very dangerous for people. And if you live around the Ocean, you will see fierce wild water animals. I don't like wild animals. Becouse they are fierce, scary and dangerous. Example: a snakes is very poisonous wild animals, tiger and lion is fierce wild animals. And they are dangerous for people life. I Love watching animals in the zoo. Becouse it is very useful for relaxing at leisure.
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at the time. One day we went to zoo. I
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great and interesting. It is
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in forest. If you
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in city, you will go to zoo and you can
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in America, Africa and Australia. If you can
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, scary and
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poisonous wild
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useful for relaxing at leisure.
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IELTS essay About wild animals life this condition leads to the death of the animals

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
171 words
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