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A true story you experience or watch in television

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It was a training art for Vietnamese Teacher's Day in high school a year ago. My school had required each class to prepare a dance or sing so we chose dancing and we had 7 days to finish it. Certainly, I was a member of the dance team of my class. On the first day, we took a band member and started to choose a song that fit our abilities. Then we went online to find movements to practice. The next day, at the of class, I stayed for dance practice. During the training period, we had a disagreement with another member about the preparation set of costumes and formations. Someone who was dependent thought that the team was very crowded, so they were often absent and badly late while making an appointment, they gave themselves the right to take a break from practice to go out without asking the leader's permission. Those are people who didn't move clearly or lost focus when practicing in class. Then we had a meeting to point out each other's shortcomings, report back to the teacher to solve those problems. Gradually, we knew each other better. We had a break happily after intense training, we ate, drank, and talked together before going home. We trained quickly a lot better and better. Finally, my class was chosen to perform. I felt extremely excited because it was a nice memory with my class.
It was a training art for Vietnamese Teacher's Day in high school a year ago. My school had required each
class
to prepare a dance or sing
so
we chose
dancing and
we had 7 days to finish it.
Certainly
, I was a member of the dance team of my
class
. On the
first
day, we took a band member and
started
to choose a song that fit our abilities. Then we went online to find movements to practice. The
next
day, at the of
class
, I stayed for dance practice. During the training period, we had a disagreement with another member about the preparation set of costumes and formations. Someone who was dependent
thought
that the team was
very
crowded,
so
they were
often
absent and
badly
late while making an appointment, they gave themselves the right to take a break from practice to go out without asking the leader's permission. Those are
people
who didn't
move
clearly
or lost focus when practicing in
class
. Then we had a meeting to point out each other's shortcomings, report back to the teacher to solve those problems.
Gradually
, we knew each other better. We had a break
happily
after intense training, we ate, drank, and talked together
before
going home. We trained
quickly
a lot better and better.
Finally
, my
class
was chosen
to perform. I felt
extremely
excited
because
it was a nice memory with my
class
.
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IELTS essay A true story you experience or watch in television

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
237 words
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5.0
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