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You recently visited a new shopping centre in your town. You have decided to write a review of the new shopping centre for your school magazine.

You recently visited a new shopping centre in your town. You have decided to write a review of the new shopping centre for your school magazine. a779Y
Nowadays, I had visited a new shopping centre in my town called Julies. It is located in the centre of the town. The mall is huge and it is splendid to look at. There are three floors which include a large parking space in the basement. It is easy for people to get to as there are many entrance and road signs. If you can't find the shop, you can easily ask for the shop assistant or take a map to lead yourself. Also, it's definitely a good place to meet your friends as there are many cafeteria for you to sit and chat. You can also go to the ground floor to look for different brands of modern clothes, jewellery and make-up. All the shop assistants are friendly and helpful too. On the other hand, although there are many range of shops, everything seems expensive and unaffordable. There are no discount for you even if you ask for. Moreover, people cannot find a good sports shop. There are fewer range of shops that selling quality sports equipment. Sometimes, people would get annoyed when they already pay the parking fee but couldn't find the shoes they want. It may be urgent for them to have a sport shoes or other equipment. I certainly would recommend this shopping centre for everyone. The cost is quite expensive but it is well worth to my money as I am enjoy spending time at there.
Nowadays, I had visited a new shopping
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centre
in my town called Julies. It
is located
in the
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centre
of the town. The mall is huge and it is splendid to look at. There are three floors which include a large parking space in the basement. It is easy for
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people
to
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get
to as there are
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many
entrance and road signs. If you can't find the
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shop
, you can
easily
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ask for
the
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shop
assistant or take a map to lead yourself.
Also
, it's definitely a
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good
place to
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meet
your friends as there are
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many cafeteria
for you to sit and chat. You can
also
go to the
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ground floor
to look for
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different
brands of modern clothes,
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jewellery
and
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make
-up. All the
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shop
assistants are friendly and helpful too.

On the other hand
, although there are
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many range
of
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shops
, everything seems expensive and unaffordable. There are no discount for you even if you
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ask for
.
Moreover
,
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people
cannot find a
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good
sports
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shop
. There are fewer range of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shops
that selling quality sports equipment.
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Sometimes
,
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people
would
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get
annoyed when they already pay the parking fee
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but
couldn't find the shoes they want. It may be urgent for them to have a sport shoes or other equipment.

I
certainly
would recommend this shopping
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centre
for everyone. The cost is quite expensive
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but
it is well worth to my money as I am enjoy spending time at there.
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IELTS essay You recently visited a new shopping centre in your town. You have decided to write a review of the new shopping centre for your school magazine.

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
241 words
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