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a plethora of companies launch commercial advertisements in order to gain higher awareness of the customer. Some parties argue that advertising can not attract their interest, and they tend to not pay attention to it.

a plethora of companies launch commercial advertisements in order to gain higher awareness of the customer. Some parties argue that advertising can not attract their interest, and they tend to not pay attention to it. yx3El
Nowadays, a plethora of companies launch commercial advertisements in order to gain higher awareness of the customer. Some parties argue that advertising can not attract their interest, and they tend to not pay attention to it. In my opinion, ads are one of the significant tools to influence people to purchase products from their company. First of all if that person has negative experiences toward commercials, they tend to not pay attention to it. Likewise, some of the ads have negative purposes, putting false information and don’t be precise to the customers. For example, some companies advertise the price which is higher than the market. Even though the customer does not realize at the first place, and makes the decision to purchase the product. When customers get the correct information afterward, they tend to have negative experiences toward the ads, and do not give the meaning to the commercial anymore. On the other hand, some advertising provides monetary benefits to the customer. Similarly, discounts from the ads could be applied to the customer, resulting in getting the product at the lower price. Therefore, price sensitive customers pay attention, and give meaning to the ads that provide them with the monetary benefit. Moreover, modeling strategy is one of the marketing tools that can make customers interested in the products and end up purchasing it. Paradoxically, launching the right target group is the essential thing the company should know. In the other words, putting the commercial at the right place and correct people, resulting in a strong voice to persuade silences to buy products. In conclusion, from all mentioned above advertising can successfully attract the interest and persuade the customers to buy the goods when the customers receive the benefit from the ads.
Nowadays, a plethora of
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companies
launch
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commercial
advertisements in order to gain higher awareness of the
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customer
.
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Some
parties argue that advertising can not attract their interest, and they tend to not pay attention to it. In my opinion, ads are one of the significant tools to influence
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people
to
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purchase
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products
from their
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company
.

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First of all
if that person has
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negative
experiences toward commercials, they tend to not pay attention to it.
Likewise
,
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some of the
ads have
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negative
purposes, putting false information and don’t be precise to the
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customers
.
For example
,
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some
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companies
advertise the price which is higher than the market.
Even though
the
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customer
does not realize at the
first
place, and
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makes
the decision to
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purchase
the
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product
. When
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customers
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get
the correct information afterward, they tend to have
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negative
experiences toward the ads, and do not give the meaning to the
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commercial
anymore.

On the other hand
,
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some
advertising provides monetary benefits to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customer
.
Similarly
, discounts from the ads could
be applied
to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customer
, resulting in getting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
product
at the lower price.
Therefore
, price sensitive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customers
pay attention, and give meaning to the ads that provide them with the monetary benefit.

Moreover
, modeling strategy is one of the marketing tools that can
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make
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customers
interested in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
up purchasing it.
Paradoxically
, launching the right target group is the essential thing the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
should know. In the other words, putting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
commercial
at the right place and correct
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
, resulting in a strong voice to persuade silences to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
products.

In conclusion
, from all mentioned above advertising can
successfully
attract the interest and persuade the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
customers
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
goods
when the
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customers
receive the benefit from the ads.
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IELTS essay a plethora of companies launch commercial advertisements in order to gain higher awareness of the customer. Some parties argue that advertising can not attract their interest, and they tend to not pay attention to it.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
291 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
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