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A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

What's worth? Our society is developing a very materialistic approach to measure how a person is admired or not. I agree that personal characteristics and values have been forgotten on that count and replaced by wealth and social status. The first impression is what counts – they say. That phrase might be the perfect example of how limited and materialistic we transformed our relations. If we believe we can get to know somebody only by their appearance and possessions, we might be leading to a more futile society than we can even predict. The second or third question when we meet someone for the first time is what we do for a living. Therefore, we associate social status and appearance with the character of a person instead of getting to know their emotional intelligence or how empathetic they are. As a society guided by a false necessity of consumerism, many relationships are misguided by those erroneous judgements. The attractivity of wealthiness can lead individuals to approximate themselves of people who lack of character but have a full bank account. Because society see money’s worth as a synonym of personal value, some people may get involved with somebody who is not able to respond feelings, tell the truth or be kind. As a consequence, all the admiration or inspiration generated by the materialistic reading in the beginning starts to fall over and the reality of a person’s values, or the lack of them, shows up. Overall, the capitalist society forgot that, as human beings, we have feelings, emotions and history. More than that, we have actions which we respond for. As a consequence, we replaced original values by limited and futile predictions of character leaded by financial and social standards.
What's worth?

Our
society
is developing a
very
materialistic approach to measure how a person
is admired
or not. I
agree
that personal characteristics and values have
been forgotten
on that count and replaced by wealth and social status.

The
first
impression is what counts
they say. That phrase might be the perfect example of how limited and materialistic we transformed our relations. If we believe we can
get
to know somebody
only
by their appearance and possessions, we might be leading to a more futile
society
than we can even predict. The second or third question when we
meet
someone for the
first
time is what we do for a living.
Therefore
, we associate social status and appearance with the character of a person
instead
of getting to know their emotional intelligence or how empathetic they are.

As a
society
guided by a false necessity of consumerism,
many
relationships
are misguided
by those erroneous judgements. The
attractivity
of wealthiness can lead individuals to approximate themselves of
people
who lack of character
but
have a full bank account.
Because
society
see
money’s worth as a synonym of personal
value
,
some
people
may
get
involved with somebody who is not able to respond feelings,
tell
the truth or be kind. As a consequence, all the admiration or inspiration generated by the materialistic reading in the beginning
starts
to fall over and the reality of a person’s values, or the lack of them,
shows
up.

Overall
, the capitalist
society
forgot that, as human beings, we have feelings, emotions and history. More than that, we have actions which we respond for. As a consequence, we replaced original values by limited and futile predictions of character leaded by financial and social standards.
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IELTS essay A person’s worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honour, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. with this opinion?

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