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A lot of food consumed is processed food, especially with regards to ready-made meals which are a quick and easy option for parents who are working hard.

A lot of food consumed is processed food, especially with regards to ready-made meals which are a quick and easy option for parents who are working hard. 0aLYQ
In western society, the approximately 20% of teenagers has increased by overweight in last 10 years. There are a number of causes for this situation as well as effects for this. It was discussed in further paragraph. To begin with, there are several causes by overweight youth. First and foremost, fast-food was more popular in recent years and A lot of food consumed is processed food, especially with regards to ready-made meals which are a quick and easy option for parents who are working hard. However, young people was liked to ate fast food and not proper digestion process done in stomach so that weight has been increased. Secondly, the facilities are provided to children has been increased by parents and the adult was not able to do any kind of physical work. Hence, they are overweight. Such as, vehicles are provided by parents so that if toddler ought to go anywhere they merely used their vehicle as a transportation in a small distances. Consequently, it has various effects for condition of adults. The awareness and activeness of their body has been decreased due to overwight, and they can not more focus on their education as well as future goal. Additionally, juvenile was suffered from their health. For example, teenagers are effect by various dissed because of having overwight, and they are become inactive. To conclude, the problems for overweight in children because of modern facilities and bad eating habits like fastfood however it directly effect on their health as well as they became inactive.
In western society, the approximately 20% of
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teenagers
has increased by
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overweight
in last 10 years. There are a number of causes for this situation
as well
as effects for this. It
was discussed
in
further
paragraph.

To
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begin
with, there are several causes by
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overweight
youth.
First
and foremost,
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fast
-food was more popular in recent years and
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A lot of
food consumed
is processed
food,
especially
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with regards to
ready-made meals which are a quick and easy option for parents who are working
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hard
.
However
, young
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people
was liked
to ate
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fast
food and not proper digestion process done in stomach
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so
that weight has
been increased
.
Secondly
, the facilities
are provided
to children has
been increased
by parents and the adult was not able to do any kind of physical work.
Hence
, they are
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overweight
. Such as, vehicles
are provided
by parents
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so
that if toddler ought to go anywhere they
merely
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used
their vehicle as a transportation in a
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small
distances.

Consequently
, it has various effects for condition of adults. The awareness and activeness of their body has
been decreased
due to
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overwight
, and they can not more focus on their education
as well
as future goal.
Additionally
, juvenile
was suffered
from their health.
For example
,
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teenagers
are
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effect
by various dissed
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because
of having
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overwight
, and they
are become
inactive.

To conclude
, the problems for
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overweight
in children
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because
of modern facilities and
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bad
eating habits like
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fastfood
however
it
directly
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effect
on their health
as well
as they became inactive.
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IELTS essay A lot of food consumed is processed food, especially with regards to ready-made meals which are a quick and easy option for parents who are working hard.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
255 words
6.0
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