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A large number of people think that nowadays women should not work hard to earn their living; they should spend more time in caring for their families. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Write a paragraph of about 200 words to support your position.

A large number of people think that nowadays women should not work hard to earn their living; they should spend more time in caring for their families. of about 200 words to support your position. GWnJB
In this day and age, because of the development of the world, almost things have become more civilized. But, since then there have grown up many controversial issues, and recently, gender equality is being hotly debated: whether nowadays women should spend more time caring for their families. In my point of view, I disagree with this idea. First, gender equality has become one of the global climates. Therefore, it is not advisable to impose all the housework on women, it should be divided equally among each family member. Second, women do not rely heavily on their husbands, especially in money terms. The autonomy of money can help women and their husbands avoid quarrels, which, as far as I can see, is that much of the reason bring about family problems involves money. Although it is good for women to be financially independent, there are still many people who have "old-fashioned" thinking. They always impose family care only on women, the works like business, or management are assumed that women can't do, or they cannot do as well as men. But in my opinion, whatever the men can do, women can do, even better. In conclusion, I always stand my ground that women should work hard to earn money, that they can develop independence, help support their family financially. And it is a way to show equality between the two sexes.
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of the development of the world, almost things have become more civilized.
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, since then there have grown up
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many
controversial issues, and recently, gender equality is being
hotly
debated: whether nowadays
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women
should spend more time caring for their
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families
. In my point of view, I disagree with this
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idea
.
First
, gender equality has become one of the global climates.
Therefore
, it is not advisable to impose all the housework on
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women
, it should
be divided
equally
among each
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family
member. Second,
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women
do not rely
heavily
on their husbands,
especially
in
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money
terms. The autonomy of
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money
can
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help
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women
and their husbands avoid quarrels, which, as far as I can
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see
, is that much of the reason bring about
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family
problems involves
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money
. Although it is
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good
for
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women
to be
financially
independent, there are
still
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many
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people
who have
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-fashioned
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thinking. They always impose
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family
care
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on
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women
, the works like business, or management
are assumed
that
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women
can't do, or they cannot do
as well
as
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men
.
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But
in my opinion, whatever the
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men
can do,
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women
can do, even better.
In conclusion
, I always stand my ground that
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women
should work
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hard
to earn
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money
, that they can develop independence,
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help
support their
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family
financially
. And it is a way to
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show
equality between the two sexes.
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IELTS essay A large number of people think that nowadays women should not work hard to earn their living; they should spend more time in caring for their families. of about 200 words to support your position.

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230 words
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