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a job that you would like to do for a day

a job that you would like to do for a day OELEG
I would definitely try living the life of a soldier atleast for one day. I know, it doesn't count in on being a job; it's completely a responsibility. But living their life would mean the world to me. I was always fascinated by the life of the soldiers right when I was a child. The amount of courage, valuor, affection, patience they possess is unfathomable. The aura of a soldier is altogether different, nowhere to be found. I want to feel that fear of being in an adverse situation and then conquering my fear to come out like a warrior. I want to live that disciplined life, where all the soldiers live together as one BIG FAMILY, irrespective of all their differences.
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living their
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would mean the world to me. I was always fascinated by the
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of the
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soldiers
right when I was a child. The amount of courage,
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valuor
, affection, patience they possess is unfathomable. The aura of a
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is altogether
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different
, nowhere to
be found
. I want to feel that fear of being in an adverse situation and then conquering my fear to
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come
out like a warrior. I want to
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that disciplined
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life
, where all the
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soldiers
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together as one
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FAMILY, irrespective of all their differences.

IELTS essay a job that you would like to do for a day

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
122 words
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4.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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