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A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, includes uses for food and research. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, includes uses for food and research. qBqG
There have been ongoing debates whether human being should use animals for their needs or not. There are spit opinions regarding this. Some believe that it is immoral and they should be treated as equals; however, a few others claim that animals can be used for any purpose. Therefore, before arriving on a decision, both views should be examined. Discussing the first view, the foremost arguments the animal lovers put forward is that the animals are as important as humans in nature. Though they are not superior to humans, they form a vital clue in the food chain. So, they should neither be used nor be disturbed. Besides this, to exploit animals in any manner is immoral unethical. Experts to animal rights say that all the members in the living kingdom have equal rights to survive. On the flip side, the supporters of the latter view favours exploitation of animals for their needs and purposes. The most valid reason they give is that humans being the most superior animals in nature, they get an unsaid right to use the lower animals. Apart from this, it has been proved since ages that the relationship between the two is quite mutual. Rather than harming, man has tactfully used animals for different purpose based on the animal’s physical ability or its unique skill. To illustrate, dogs are used by the police for their sense of smell, horses to travel, donkeys as least of burden and many more examples. To conclude and give my opinion, I would certainly vote for the second opinion. The reason is that although man exploits animals for his need, the relationship has not disturbed the nature to a serious extent. However, care should be taken that this confidence should not ignore the harm that can seriously decrease their numbers or damage them in any manner.
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use
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animals
for their

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needs
or not. There
are spit
opinions regarding this.
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believe that it is immoral and
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they


should
be treated
as equals;
however
, a few others claim that
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animals
can be
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used
for any

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purpose
.
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,
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before
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arriving on
a decision, both views should
be examined
.

Discussing the
first
view, the foremost arguments the
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animal
lovers put forward is

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that
the
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animals
are as
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important
as humans in nature. Though they are not superior
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to


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humans
, they form a vital clue in the food chain.
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So
, they should neither be
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used
nor be

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disturbed
.
Besides
this, to exploit
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animals
in any manner is immoral unethical. Experts
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to


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animal
rights say that all the members in the living kingdom have equal rights to survive.

On the flip side, the supporters of the latter view
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favours
exploitation of
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animals
for

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their
needs and purposes. The most valid reason they give is that humans being the
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most


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superior
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animals
in nature, they
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get
an unsaid right to
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use
the lower
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animals
. Apart from this,

it has
been proved
since ages that the relationship between the two is quite mutual.
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than
harming,
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man
has
tactfully
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used
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animals
for
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different
purpose based on the animal’s

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physical
ability or its unique
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skill
. To illustrate, dogs are
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used
by the police for their sense
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of


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smell
, horses to travel, donkeys as least of burden and
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many
more examples.

To conclude
and give my opinion, I would
certainly
vote for the second opinion. The

reason is that although
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man
exploits
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animals
for his need, the relationship has not disturbed

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the
nature to a serious extent.
However
, care should
be taken
that this confidence should not

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ignore
the harm that can
seriously
decrease their numbers or damage them in any manner.
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IELTS essay A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, includes uses for food and research.

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