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A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

Nowadays, animals are widely by humans for commuting to different locations. Most people believe that animals are not harmed for our own benefits as animals also have similar rights as human beings whereas, some people believe that people should use animals for their own sake such as eatables and research. In this essay, I will argue on both the sides and give my opinion from my own knowledge and experience with help of some examples. On the one side, animals should not be harmed for our own profits as they also face illness in body and also get tired after struggling from one place to another but only thing is that they are not able to speak like us. If we feel pain we can take medicines and treat ourselves with different treatments and remedies although, they are not able to get all that and have to suffer pain. Secondly as per the laws, it is ordered that animals are not killed or harmed by anyone for their own entertainment and benefits and for it strict laws are there which results to a strict punishment. On the other hand, animals are widely used to fulfil different needs of humans as we are extremely dependent on animals for protein rich diet. For instance, milk, eggs, meat, cheese, soya etc are the main sources of protein which can be obtained from animals only. At the same time, any new experiment is always done on animals first because there is no value of animals in front of humans. For example, to test any medicine and vaccine, animals and birds are the first living creatures to face advantage and reactions of that medicine. While, they know better that something that is reacting on them can not react on us and vice-versa. In conclusion, animals should not face difficulties from human side as they also have freedom and rights to do anything. In my opinion, procedures and experiments that cause harm to them should be stopped and taken strict action against them. Whereas, we can take protein diet from them as they maintain the ecological chain.
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sake such as eatables and research. In this essay, I will argue on both the sides and give my opinion from my
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On the one side,
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for our
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profits as they
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tired after struggling from one place to another
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treatments and remedies although, they are not able to
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animals
are not killed or harmed by anyone for their
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entertainment and benefits and for
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strict laws are there which results to a strict punishment.

On the other hand
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animals
are
widely
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used
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different
needs of
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humans
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extremely
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animals
for protein rich diet.
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.
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test
any medicine and vaccine,
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animals
and birds are the
first
living creatures to face advantage and reactions of that medicine. While, they know better that something
that is
reacting on them can not react on us and vice-versa.

In conclusion
,
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animals
should not face difficulties from
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human
side as they
also
have freedom and rights to do anything. In my opinion, procedures and experiments that cause harm to them should be
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stopped
and taken strict action against them. Whereas, we can take protein diet from them as they maintain the ecological chain.
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IELTS essay A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research.

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