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A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some persons believed that browbeaten animals in undoubtedly harsh meanwhile we need to treat them as other human being like us consequently, we can observe that specific animals required for rendering help that that is undeniable in respect to no other alternative we have like as a substitute for non-vegetarian cuisine as well as for research. This essay will discuss aforesaid topic that certain animals are required in our daily necessities. Some portions of animals are unnecessary exploited to satisfy person’s need. To commence with, cows are being exploited without any specific need. This is because a group of people slaughter them for food that is again one of the unlawful practices in some of the state. For instance, exploitations are banned in various states as cow in one of the holy animal and provide lots of diary requirement those are essential to meet physical need to a people. Likewise, horses and donkeys were used in hilly areas as a means of transport. In such a technical upgraded world still these animals are used as carrying loads which can be replaced with substitute of any vehicles. As a result, they are beaten by their owner to carry excess amount of things irrespective of their strength. Certain species required for scientific research procedure. However, many birds and animals are used for consumptions. Due to these we obscure the need of required protein and carbohydrate from these products which is highly essential for our body. Thus, in colder countries these are used for food which helps in keeping body warmer and it is very substantial. Some animals are used for specific research. Any kinds of antidote are firstly tried on animals, to see the favorable results whether it is feasible or not. Therefore, it is one of the vital factor that cannot be ignored neither we have any substitute. To sum up, to maintain ecological balance as well as life cycle, some animals are used to meet the requirements of humans that is debated topic whereas slaughtering is not only way to overcome this situation. In my opinion, it is absolutely right to use some animals for academia purpose as their existence hardly matters to support environment.
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persons believed that browbeaten
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animals
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undoubtedly
harsh meanwhile we
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need
to treat them as other human being like us
consequently
, we can observe that specific
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animals
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required
for rendering
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help
that
that is
undeniable in respect to no other alternative we have like as a substitute for non-vegetarian cuisine
as well
as for research. This essay will discuss aforesaid topic that certain
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animals
are
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required
in our daily necessities.

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Some
portions of
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animals
are unnecessary exploited to satisfy person’s
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need
. To commence with, cows are
being exploited
without any specific
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need
. This is
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because
a group of
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people
slaughter them for food
that is
again one of the unlawful practices in
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some of the
state.
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,
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exploitations
are banned
in various states as cow in one of the holy
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animal
and provide
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lots of diary
requirement those are essential to
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meet
physical
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need
to a
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people
.
Likewise
, horses and donkeys were
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used
in hilly areas as a means of transport. In such a technical upgraded world
still
these
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animals
are
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used
as carrying loads which can
be replaced
with substitute of any vehicles.
As a result
, they
are beaten
by their owner to carry excess amount of things irrespective of their strength.

Certain species
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required
for scientific research procedure.
However
,
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many
birds and
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animals
are
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used
for
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consumptions
. Due to these we obscure the
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need
of
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required
protein and carbohydrate from these products which is
highly
essential for our body.
Thus
, in colder countries these are
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used
for food which
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helps
in keeping body
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warmer and
it is
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very
substantial.
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Some
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animals
are
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used
for specific research. Any kinds of antidote are
firstly
tried on
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animals
, to
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see
the favorable results whether it is feasible or not.
Therefore
, it is one of the vital factor that cannot be
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ignored
neither we have any substitute.

To sum up, to maintain ecological balance
as well
as life cycle,
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some
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animals
are
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used
to
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meet
the requirements of humans that
is debated
topic whereas slaughtering is not
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only
way to overcome this situation. In my opinion, it is
absolutely
right to
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use
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some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animals
for academia purpose as their existence hardly matters to support environment.

IELTS essay A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research.

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