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A fictional story where you entered the world that the book is set in

A fictional story where you entered the world that the book is set in 7Jbl6
Every word had me wishing I could be there with her, tell her she’s not alone. It hurt so much that I closed my eyes for a moment, everything around me suddenly going cold and dry, and when I opened them, I wasn’t in my room anymore. Every detail I had read about, every single description of their room, was exactly how I had imagined it. I heard retching from the right of me, and padded slowly to the bathroom, the cold marble of the floor biting into the soles of my bare feet. I didn’t have to look to know who it was, nor did I have to turn around to confirm that the steady breaths I heard came from a sleeping Tamlin. The door was ajar and there she was, hurling her guts into the toilet, her fingers gripping the edges so hard that it made her knuckles go white. The scuffle of my feet wouldn’t have been discernable if not for her fae hearing. I stepped into the bathroom and her head snapped towards me, jumping up and feet widening in a fighting stance, the movement a little abnormal due to the novelty of her lengthened limbs. Those blue gray eyes narrowed in confusion when she found a delicate human in place of the formidable creature she was used to expecting in Prythian. I paused at the momentary fear in her eyes, remembering all the horrors she had faced Under the Mountain, that haunted her even here, in this place that had once been her safe haven. We stared into each other's eyes for a long moment, and before either of us could utter a word, she whirled around and heaved violently into the toilet. I hurried forward and kneeled on the floor, hesitating only for a second before I gathered her disheveled hair in one hand, the other rubbing soothing circles on her back. She froze for a second, and then relaxed, letting me soothe her. I kept caressing her back, the knobs of her spine prominent against my touch. She’d grown so thin, the weight of the past few months rapidly eating way at her. It made me see red, knowing that Tamlin didn’t do anything, claiming that her protection relied on her staying in the house.
Every word had me wishing I could be there with her,
tell
her she’s not alone. It hurt
so
much that I closed my
eyes
for a moment, everything around me
suddenly
going
cold
and dry, and when I opened them, I wasn’t in my room anymore. Every detail I had read about, every single description of their room, was exactly how I had imagined it. I heard retching from the right of me, and padded
slowly
to the bathroom, the
cold
marble of the floor biting into the soles of my bare feet. I didn’t
have to
look to know who it was, nor did I
have to
turn around to confirm that the steady breaths I heard came from a sleeping
Tamlin
. The door was ajar and there she was, hurling her guts into the toilet, her fingers gripping the edges
so
hard
that it made her knuckles go white. The scuffle of my feet wouldn’t have been
discernable
if not for her
fae
hearing. I stepped into the bathroom and her head snapped towards me, jumping up and feet widening in a fighting stance, the movement a
little
abnormal due to the novelty of her lengthened limbs. Those blue gray
eyes
narrowed in confusion when she found a delicate human in place of the formidable creature she was
used
to expecting in
Prythian
. I paused at the momentary fear in her
eyes
, remembering all the horrors she had faced Under the Mountain, that haunted her even here, in this place that had once been her safe haven. We stared into each other's
eyes
for a long moment, and
before
either of us could utter a word, she whirled around and heaved
violently
into the toilet. I hurried forward and kneeled on the floor, hesitating
only
for a second
before
I gathered her disheveled hair in one hand, the other rubbing soothing circles on her back. She froze for a second, and then relaxed, letting me soothe her. I
kept
caressing her back, the knobs of her spine prominent against my touch. She’d grown
so
thin, the weight of the past few months
rapidly
eating way at her. It made me
see
red, knowing that
Tamlin
didn’t do anything, claiming that her protection relied on her staying in the
house
.
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IELTS essay A fictional story where you entered the world that the book is set in

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
382 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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