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A few years ago some of the sea otter populations off of the Alaskan coast started to decline rapidly

A few years ago some of the sea otter populations off of the Alaskan coast started to decline rapidly 2R2ow
The reading and the lecture are both about the decline in sea otter populations. While the reading’s author states that pollution is a cause of their populations declining, the lecturer suggests that the greatest factor is predation. The lecturer casts doubts on the main points made in the reading by providing three reasons. First of all, according to the reading, higher levels of pollutants in water samples support the pollution theory. However, the lecturer disputes this by explaining that if sea otters had been killed by pollutants in water, their remains would appear on shores, which indicates predators ate the sea otters. Secondly, the reading states that populations of other small sea animals have been hurt by pollution. Nevertheless, the lecturer refutes this argument. He argues that because the whale population decreased, nearby orcas had to eat otters instead. Finally, the reading claims that pollutant concentration can explain the uneven pattern of diminishing sea otter populations. On the other hand, the lecturer believes that this uneven population decline corresponds with the prevalence of orcas in different areas. He thinks that the otter population declines more in places with orcas, and less in those inaccessible to orcas. In conclusion, although the reading and the lecture both concern hypotheses about diminishing sea otter populations, the three main points made in the reading are effectively challenged by the lecturer.
The
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reading
and the lecture are both about the decline in
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sea
otter
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populations
. While the
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reading’s
author states that pollution is a cause of their
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populations
declining, the
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lecturer
suggests that the greatest factor is predation. The
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lecturer
casts doubts on the main points made in the
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reading
by providing three reasons.

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First of all
, according to the
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reading
, higher levels of pollutants in water samples support the pollution theory.
However
, the
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lecturer
disputes this by explaining that if
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sea
otters had
been killed
by pollutants in water, their remains would appear on shores, which indicates predators ate the
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sea
otters.

Secondly
, the
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reading
states that
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populations
of other
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small
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sea
animals have
been hurt
by pollution.
Nevertheless
, the
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lecturer
refutes this argument. He argues that
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because
the whale
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population
decreased, nearby orcas had to eat otters
instead
.

Finally
, the
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reading
claims that pollutant concentration can
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explain
the uneven pattern of diminishing
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sea
otter
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populations
.
On the other hand
, the
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lecturer
believes that this uneven
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population
decline corresponds with the prevalence of orcas in
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different
areas. He
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thinks
that the otter
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population
declines more in places with orcas, and less in those inaccessible to orcas.

In conclusion
, although the
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reading
and the lecture both concern hypotheses about diminishing
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sea
otter
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populations
, the three main points made in the
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reading
are
effectively
challenged by the
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lecturer
.
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IELTS essay A few years ago some of the sea otter populations off of the Alaskan coast started to decline rapidly

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
226 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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