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A/D professional athletes who receive high salaries, such as football and basketball players, deserve what they get.

A/D professional athletes who receive high salaries, such as football and basketball players, deserve what they get. 56kqQ
When it comes to whether professional athletes deserve high salaries, opinions vary from person to person. From my perspective, I always regard athletes as a spirit that inspires all of us to move on when faced with difficulties. They try their hardest in training. Their body has been full of sickness and most of them sacrificed their whole youth for this career. Therefore, I believe it is a must for them to get a high pay. First of all, for most ordinary people, we just do some basic exercise a day, such as jogging, swimming and yoga. However, for those athletes, their training is much mo. . .
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to whether professional athletes deserve high salaries, opinions vary from person to person. From my perspective, I always regard athletes as a spirit that inspires all of us to
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on when faced with difficulties. They try their hardest in training. Their body has been full of sickness and most of them sacrificed their whole youth for this career.
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a high pay.

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IELTS essay A/D professional athletes who receive high salaries, such as football and basketball players, deserve what they get.

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2 paragraphs
108 words
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