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A company has announced that it wishes to build a large car producing factory near your town.

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Recently, an industry of new car producing manufactory has mentioned that it will be a huge car factory near our village and it expected to begin build near our country. This essay will discuss both sides of related statement and will try to give my own opinion. On the one hand, it would be not wrong approach to build a new car industry beside village. Cause of this, people can easily get a new car in their city. First of all, humans need not to pay for a taxi that they go with. Secondly, our hometown may become famous, because, human beings will frequently invite to the our country and they will know about our village where it situated. For instance, one group of people invited to the our city to rest and they realized that in our countryside has not different type of buildings, consequently, it would be better if there had many buildings. On the other hand, residents of the following town may be harm from air which will cause of the expected machine producing industry with its unsafe activities like increasing an amount of rubbishes and filling the air with pollution. To avoid such problems, population of that village cannot make anything, out of being ill. To support this sentence, the world is being harmed by human activity, instead of reduce such matters, governments are allowing to the different type of pollutionable professions to work despite any bad results. From my point of view, I personally stand against to the such kind of industries which increase a number of dying. In conclusion, an enourmes machine manufactory may encourage numerous people or discourage them. On the whole, it has more disadvantages than the advantages, thus, government should put limit to the number of harmful companies.
Recently, an
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car
producing
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manufactory
has mentioned that it will be a huge
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car
factory near our
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village
and it
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expected
to
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begin
build near our country. This essay will discuss both sides of related statement and will try to give my
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own
opinion.

On the one hand, it would be not
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wrong
approach to build a new
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car
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industry
beside
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village
. Cause of this,
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people
can
easily
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get
a new
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car
in their city.
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First of all
, humans need not
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to pay
for a taxi that they
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go with
.
Secondly
, our hometown may become
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famous
,
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because
, human beings will
frequently
invite to
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the our country
and they will know about our
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village
where it situated.
For instance
, one group of
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people
invited to
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the our city
to
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rest and
they realized that in our countryside has not
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different
type of buildings,
consequently
, it would be better if there had
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many
buildings.

On the other hand
, residents of the following town may be harm from air which will cause of the
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expected
machine producing
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industry
with its unsafe activities like increasing an amount of rubbishes and filling the air with pollution. To avoid such problems, population of that
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village
cannot
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make
anything, out of being ill. To support this sentence, the world is
being harmed
by human activity,
instead
of
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reduce
such matters,
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governments
are allowing to the
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different
type of
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pollutionable
professions to work despite any
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bad
results.

From my point of view, I
personally
stand against to the such kind of
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industries
which increase a number of dying.

In conclusion
, an
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enourmes
machine
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manufactory
may encourage numerous
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people
or discourage them.
On the whole
, it has more disadvantages than the advantages,
thus
,
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government
should put limit to the number of harmful
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companies
.

IELTS essay A company has announced that it wishes to build a large car producing factory near your town.

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
297 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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