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5. Ihe moin purpose of public Iibrories is lo provide books ond lheY shouldn'f wosle lheir limited resources ond spoce on providing expensive hi-tech medio such os computer soflwore, videos ond DVDs. To whol exlenf do you agree or disogree with this sfofemen

Since centuries libraries have been in the service of man. These libraries are the repositories of never ending knowledge known as books. Some people opine that libraries should only provide books and not other hi-tech media such as computer software, videos and DVDs. l, however, believe that such hi-tech media should be there in libraries in addition to book. It is easy to see why some people say that libraries should not have CDs and DVDs. They fear that the traditional book will lose its appeal. Because of technology, books are now being converted into disc forms such as CDs and DVDs. Even the availability of books in the form of electronic media on NET is putting in danger the importance of the traditional libraries, which house only traditional books. Here, my argument would be that libraries have to keep in stock many copies of a single book. CDs and DVDS occupy less space and so the availability of CDs and DVDs in addition to books seems very practical because of the shortage of space in most libraries. Secondly, one should keep in mind that a person goes to a library not only to search and get information from books but also to sit and study there. Some books, which are out of print or not available in that particular area can be accessed through CDs and DVDs. What is more, many students cannot afford the expensive hi tech media and lnternet connection in their homes. lt is well known that the lnternet is an ocean of knowledge and students need to access it for assignments. Therefore, they can access all this in the library. Therefore, computers and the lnternet should be available in libraries. Another important point why people oppose such hi-tech media is that they fear that instead of using it positively students will use it for chatting and surfing objectionable sites. They have a point, but this can be looked into by blocking such sites in the libraries. My final argument would be that with the help of computers the records of the books in the library could be maintained very efficiently. For example, most modern libraries can be maintained by just one or two librarians, whereas earlier they needed a lot of manpower. To conclude, it can be said that advancement should be welcome in every field but the importance of the libraries for their fundamental role cannot be put aside. Equipping libraries with high-tech media will add more crowns of success to the importance of libraries
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Since
centuries libraries have been in the service of
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man
. These libraries are the repositories of never

ending knowledge known as
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books
.
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Some
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people
opine that libraries should
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only
provide
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books
and not

other hi-tech
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media
such as computer software, videos and DVDs.
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l
,
however
, believe that such hi-tech

media should be there in libraries
in addition
to book.

It is easy to
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why
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some
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people
say that libraries should not have
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CDs
and DVDs. They fear that the

traditional
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book
will lose its appeal.
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Because
of technology,
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books
are
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now
being converted
into disc forms

such as
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CDs
and DVDs. Even the availability of
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books
in the form of electronic
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media
on NET is putting in

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danger
the importance of the traditional libraries, which
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house
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only
traditional
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books
. Here, my argument

would be that libraries
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have to
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keep
in stock
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many
copies of a single
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book
.
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CDs
and
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DVDS
occupy less space

and
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so
the availability of
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CDs
and DVDs
in addition
to
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books
seems
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very
practical
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because
of the shortage of

space in most libraries.

Secondly
, one should
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keep
in mind that a person goes to a library not
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only
to search and
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get
information

from
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books
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but
also
to sit and study there.
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Some
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books
, which are out of print or not available in that

particular area can
be accessed
through
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CDs
and DVDs.
What is more
,
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many
students cannot afford the

expensive hi tech
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media
and
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lnternet
connection in their homes.
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lt
is well known that the
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is an

ocean of knowledge and students need to access it for assignments.
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, they can access all this in

the library.
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, computers and the
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lnternet
should be available in libraries.

Another
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important
point why
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people
oppose such hi-tech
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media
is that they fear that
instead
of using it

positively
students will
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use
it for chatting and surfing objectionable sites. They have a point,
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but
this can
be looked
into by blocking such sites in the libraries. My final argument would be that with the
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help
of

computers the records of the
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books
in the library could
be maintained
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very
efficiently
.
For example
, most

modern libraries can
be maintained
by
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just
one or two librarians, whereas earlier they needed
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a lot of


manpower.

To conclude
, it can
be said
that advancement should be welcome in every field
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but
the importance of the

libraries for their fundamental role cannot
be put
aside. Equipping libraries with high-tech
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media
will
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add


more crowns of success to the importance of
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libraries
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IELTS essay 5. Ihe moin purpose of public Iibrories is lo provide books ond lheY shouldn'f wosle lheir limited resources ond spoce on providing expensive hi-tech medio such os computer soflwore, videos ond DVDs. To whol exlenf do you agree or disogree with this sfofemen

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5 paragraphs
420 words
6.0
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