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4 The environment problems facing today s world are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situations Government and large companies should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment To what v.2

4 The environment problems facing today s world are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situations Government and large companies should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment To what v. 2
Humankind is confronted with various environmental problems. It is widely believed that the impacts caused to the environment are so severe that an individual is unable to solve and only governments and enterprises can mitigate the damage. I personally disagree with this statement. On the one hand, it is apparent that we are dealing with massive environmental issues with elevating scale. For example, water contamination resulting from the manufacturing process of industrial companies has led to vast deaths of marine lives. With such severe damage, it is understandable that a solitary person is incapable of handling. Therefore, the government should be responsible for alleviating these impacts by imposing strict control and punishment on enterprises who violate the environmental protection laws. I opine that these two parties are jointly accountable for solving environmental problems. On the other hand, each person also plays an essential role in alleviating the environmental damage by applying the rules of reduce, reuse and recycle. For example, everyone should cut down on their daily water usage or utilization of private vehicles during rush hours. These acts can help us avoid clean water scarcity when draughts come or reducing air pollution in the metropolis. I believe that such small and simple acts done by a solitary person can result in positive effects on the environment if they are carried out by a large community. Therefore, it is convincing that ordinary citizens can contribute to resolving environmental problems. In conclusion, I am against the statement that a single person cannot deal with environmental issues. While it is true that cooperation between government and companies are pivotal to mitigating the impacts, individuals can also devote by taking small but powerful actions. I believe if everyone joins hands to solve these problems, it is possible that our future generations can live in better environmental conditions.
Humankind
is confronted
with various
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
problems. It is
widely
believed that the impacts caused to the environment are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
severe that an individual is unable to solve and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
and enterprises can mitigate the damage. I
personally
disagree with this statement.

On the one hand, it is apparent that we are dealing with massive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
issues with elevating scale.
For example
, water contamination resulting from the manufacturing process of industrial
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
has led to vast deaths of marine
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
. With such severe damage, it is understandable that a solitary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
person
is incapable of handling.
Therefore
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
should be responsible for alleviating these impacts by imposing strict control and punishment on enterprises who violate the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
protection laws. I opine that these two parties are
jointly
accountable for solving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
problems.

On the other hand
, each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
person
also
plays an essential role in alleviating the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
damage by applying the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
, reuse and recycle.
For example
, everyone should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
down on their daily water usage or utilization of private vehicles during rush hours. These acts can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
us avoid clean water scarcity when
Possible spelling mistake. 'draughts' is British English.
draughts
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
or reducing air pollution in the metropolis. I believe that such
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
and simple acts done by a solitary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
person
can result in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
effects on the environment if they
are carried
out by a large community.
Therefore
, it is convincing that ordinary citizens can contribute to resolving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
problems.

In conclusion
, I am against the statement that a single
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
person
cannot deal with
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
issues. While it is true that cooperation between
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
are pivotal to mitigating the impacts, individuals can
also
devote by taking
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
powerful actions. I believe if everyone
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
joins
hands to solve these problems, it is possible that our future generations can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in better
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environmental
conditions.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
12Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay 4 The environment problems facing today s world are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situations Government and large companies should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment To what v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
304 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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