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31/10/2017Some people believe that no homework should be given to children. Others, however, say that extra work is needed after school for children and teenagers in order to succeed. Discuss both the views and give your opinion including reasons and rele v.1

31/10/2017Some people believe that no homework should be given to children. Others, however, say that extra work is needed after school for children and teenagers in order to succeed. 1
Nowadays concentrating on academics only, have been become a debatable topic across the world. Some people contented that students need to be taught to focus only on their studies to get success in exams, and there is no requirement of teaching extracurricular activities such as cooking and dressing. As per my opinion, I agree that students should be taught only academics to clear examinations. However, I also believe that cooking and dressing skills also needs to be taught. Firstly, learning academics as well as clearly exams through that, have become enormously important in undergraduate's life. To support it, to attain an incredible result via studying, can make them successful in their lives. Additionally, they can direct themselves by choosing appropriate pathways for their career. For example, as per on survey of Harvard University 9 out of 10 juveniles get success by only focusing on academic subjects and getting an achievement in various fields as well. What is more, concentrating only on academics can make a child not only wise, but also knowledgeable, who can stand among legendary researchers by hunting such an extraordinary oppression via education. Moreover, educational importance is now having some incredible opportunities in distinct fields right from soil exploration to space exploration. For instance, according to one research more than 1000 students are getting trained under Mars Colonization Programme by NASA. Therefore, now one can think how essential it can be for teenagers to obtain academic knowledge! Nevertheless, teaching only education directives can make teens successful in heart, but at a certain point, adolescents should be taught some cooking and dressing knowledge too. In addition, teenage might have an interview in that scenario, particular dressing sense can play vital role also learning cooking can also be proved important as not only for their own good but also they can feed their loved ones as well. In a nutshell, academics are quite essential in students' growth and getting success with them, can make them to live a fortune active, however, cooking and dressing also essential for their personal lives.
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people
contented that students need to
be taught
to focus
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only
on their studies to
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get
success in exams, and there is no requirement of teaching extracurricular activities such as cooking and
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dressing
. As per my opinion, I
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agree
that students should
be taught
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only
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academics
to
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clear
examinations.
However
, I
also
believe that cooking and
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dressing
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skills
also
needs to
be taught
.

Firstly
, learning
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academics
as well
as
clearly
exams through that, have become
enormously
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important
in undergraduate's life. To support it, to attain an incredible result via studying, can
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make
them successful in their
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lives
.
Additionally
, they can direct themselves by choosing appropriate pathways for their career.
For example
, as per on survey of Harvard University 9 out of 10 juveniles
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get
success by
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only
focusing on
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academic
subjects and getting an achievement in various fields
as well
.

What is more
, concentrating
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only
on
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academics
can
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make
a child not
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only
wise,
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but
also
knowledgeable, who can stand among legendary researchers by hunting such an extraordinary oppression via education.
Moreover
, educational importance is
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now
having
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some
incredible opportunities in distinct fields right from soil exploration to space exploration.
For instance
, according to one research more than 1000 students are getting trained under Mars Colonization
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Programme
by NASA.
Therefore
,
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now
one can
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think
how essential it can be for
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teenagers
to obtain
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academic
knowledge!

Nevertheless
, teaching
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only
education directives can
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make
teens successful in heart,
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but
at a certain point, adolescents should
be taught
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some
cooking and
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dressing
knowledge too.
In addition
, teenage might have an interview in that scenario, particular
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dressing
sense can play vital role
also
learning cooking can
also
be proved
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important
as not
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only
for their
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own
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good
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but
also
they can feed their
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loved
ones
as well
.

In a nutshell,
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academics
are quite essential in students' growth and getting success with them, can
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make
them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
a fortune active,
however
, cooking and
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dressing
also
essential for their personal
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lives
.
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Language is the road map of a culture. It tells you where its people come from and where they are going.
Rita Mae Brown

IELTS essay 31/10/2017Some people believe that no homework should be given to children. Others, however, say that extra work is needed after school for children and teenagers in order to succeed. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
341 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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