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3. Why do parents always force their children to do housework every day? In your opinion, what benefit does this have for their children?

3. Why do parents always force their children to do housework every day? In your opinion, what benefit does this have for their children? 0MkRG
Nowdays, instead of letting their children play games or study all day, parents want their children to be able to relax their minds or help their families by doing housework. Their parents want their kids know how to share house chores, help parents to take care the house which they are live in. There are many skill kids can learn while doing housework, they will have responsibility in the work they do and try hard for it. They also could do house chores by them self and it made them to be a self made people who wasn't waited for any help by others. While doing housework, they'll understand how they parents had hard and they would helped as much as they can
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want their children to be able to relax their minds or
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their families by doing housework. Their
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want their kids know how to share
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chores,
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to take care the
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house
which they are
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kids can learn while doing housework, they will have responsibility in the work they do and try
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for it. They
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chores by them self and it made them to be a
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self made
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who wasn't waited for any
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by others. While doing housework, they'll understand how they
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had
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hard and
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as much as they
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IELTS essay 3. Why do parents always force their children to do housework every day? In your opinion, what benefit does this have for their children?

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