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2. With the increased use of computers, education is being delivered online without teachers. It is likely that there would be no role of teachers in providing education in the future. Do you agree with this view?

2. With the increased use of computers, education is being delivered online without teachers. It is likely that there would be no role of teachers in providing education in the future. Do you agree with this view? YOEd
Undoubtedly, popularity of screen assisted learning makes children tied to their personal computer for their educational requirements rather than being guided by teachers. However, teachers also have primary roles on providing quality education to the future citizens according to their different skill sets and to make them thrive on their personal life by giving importance to the human values and hence i am disagreeing with the viewpoint that the teachers will be disregarded from the educational sytem on the coming centuries. Firstly, all the children coming to an educational system of a country are not gifted with same kind of abilities to learn and understand things. Only a good teacher can quantify the different abilities of the youngsters and to guide them properly by giving adequate support on the areas they really require to advance on their learning activities. The proper control of delivering the assistance on the students challenging areas can only be achieved through an experienced teacher not through the digital methods of education. Secondly, the kids are also required to get acquaint how to behave on a society and the manners they have to be obey on a community on their early ages. Human interferance is highly needed for the students to master the social values because the digital education they are relied upon will not help them to advance on their emotional growth. The schools with professional teachers will aid the students to get in touch with their peers and will also teach them to handle the difficult situations of life through sharing, mutual caring etc. and these all benefits cannot be enjoyed on a web based learning system. In a nutshell, the teachers are really the important ones on the educational system and though their dedicated teaching systems ours kids will be advanced to the new horizons of their education and the personal life according to their various skill sets which cannot be even dreamed on an online learning system.
Undoubtedly
, popularity of screen assisted
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learning
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makes
children tied to their personal computer for their
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educational
requirements
rather
than
being guided
by teachers.

However
,
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teachers
also
have primary roles on providing quality education to the future citizens according to their
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different
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skill
sets and to
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make
them thrive on their personal life by giving importance to the human values and
hence
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i
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am disagreeing
with the viewpoint that the
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teachers
will
be disregarded
from the
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educational
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sytem
on the coming centuries.

Firstly
, all the children coming to an
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educational
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system
of a country are not gifted with same kind of abilities to learn and understand things.
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Only
a
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good
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teacher
can quantify the
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different
abilities of the youngsters and to guide them
properly
by giving adequate support on the areas they
really
require
Did you mean "advancing"? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'require' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
to advance
on their
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learning
activities. The proper control of delivering the assistance on the students challenging areas can
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only
be achieved
through an experienced
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teacher
not through the digital methods of education.

Secondly
, the kids are
also
required to
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get
acquaint how to behave on a society and the manners they
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have to
be
Consider using a past participle here: "obeyed".
obey
on a community on their early ages. Human
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interferance
is
highly
needed for the students to master the social values
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because
the digital education they
are relied
upon will not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them to advance on their emotional growth. The schools with professional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
will aid the students to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
in touch with their peers and will
also
teach them to handle the difficult situations of life through sharing, mutual caring etc. and these all benefits cannot
be enjoyed
on a web based
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learning
system.

In a nutshell, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
teachers
are
really
the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
ones on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
educational
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
system
and though their dedicated teaching
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
systems
ours kids will
be advanced
to the new horizons of their education and the personal life according to their various
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
sets which cannot be even dreamed on an online
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
system
.
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IELTS essay 2. With the increased use of computers, education is being delivered online without teachers. It is likely that there would be no role of teachers in providing education in the future. Do you agree with this view?

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
325 words
5.5
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