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2. The internet has a bigger impact on people’s lives because it is more popular than television. Do you agree or disagree?

2. The internet has a bigger impact on people’s lives because it is more popular than television. leLgo
Internet is the most powerful innovation man ever did and this have been changed people’s lifestyle totally. Many individuals contended discovery of Internet technology has been greatly affected day today life rather than television. I believe that due to its networking power and reliability people are addicted towards Internet over television, about which the upcoming paragraphs will explain in detail, followed by a reasoned conclusion. The first and foremost usage of internet is the instant access to information on almost any subject. In addition to that shops and other services are now available online and it is very helpful to the people to purchase goods and services from the comfort of their homes especially during the pandemic. For example Amazon is a well-known online shopping site and almost everything can be purchased through this site at a reasonable price. On the contrary, television has its own limit as it can only make us entertained and happy also some of the programmes can be informative and educational. However this would be accessed through Internet without the aid of television make a huge difference between Internet and tv. In addition to that internet has revolutionised communication. We can keep in touch by e-mail or instant messenger services. Even video messaging is becoming common for business meetings. For instance most of the software and IT related workers working from home nowadays with the assistance of internet. However aged people still rely on television for watching movies, news etc as they are not geek in technology. In conclusion, life has been entirely changed and controlled by Internet and become more popular than TV ever.
Internet is the most powerful innovation
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this have
been
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people’s
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Many
individuals contended discovery of Internet technology has been
greatly
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affected
day
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today
life
rather
than
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television
. I believe that due to its networking power and reliability
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people
are addicted
towards Internet over
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television
, about which the upcoming paragraphs will
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explain
in detail, followed by a reasoned conclusion.

The
first
and foremost usage of internet is the instant access to information on almost any subject.
In addition
to that shops and other services are
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now
available online and it is
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very
helpful to the
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people
to
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purchase
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goods
and services from the comfort of their homes
especially
during the pandemic.
For example
Amazon is a well-known online shopping site and almost everything can be
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purchased
through this site at a reasonable price.
On the contrary
,
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television
has its
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own
limit as it can
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make
us entertained and happy
also
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some of the
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programmes
can be informative and educational.
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However
this would
be accessed
through Internet without the aid of
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television
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make
a huge difference between Internet and
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tv
.

In addition
to that internet has
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revolutionised
communication. We can
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keep
in touch by e-mail or instant messenger services. Even video messaging is becoming common for business meetings.
For instance
most of the software and IT related workers working from home nowadays with the assistance of internet.
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However
aged
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people
still
rely on
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television
for watching movies, news etc as they are not geek in technology.

In conclusion
, life has been
entirely
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changed
and controlled by Internet and become more popular than TV ever.
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IELTS essay 2. The internet has a bigger impact on people’s lives because it is more popular than television.

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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