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2. Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea, some think they should be banned. Do you agree or disagree? Give examples of your knowledge. v.1

2. Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea, some think they should be banned. Give examples of your knowledge. v. 1
Plastic bags are one of the main things that threatened the land and sea lives because of pollution results, that people should be prevented from overconsumption. I agree with this opinion because it hurts the ground and sea lives by firing or throwing the bags. Firstly, there is an immense toxic resulted from burning plastic bags that are the main cause of death a lot of inhabited animals. For example, Egypt in 1987 the government didn't take enough aware of the effect of burning bags. Furthermore, the citizens after using bags gathered it and start to burn in the streets. As a result, the pollution spread in the air and animals smelled it. However, animals live devastated. Although the huge amount of animals passed away, the authority didn't make any restrictions to protect the pet animals. Secondly, the marine life is endangered by plastic bags; fishes and other sea creatures swallow it with all the toxic and expired food inside it and after biodegrading of bags the diseases spread among sea lives. Therefore, illness is distributed among organism life. For instance, in the USA in 2000 passengers on the boat ate snacks and after that dropped the cover of snacks into the ocean so a lot of fishes take it and after 10 years people find an increase in the rate of died fishes. In conclusion, leaving the bags or burning it, causes harm in the health of up and down souls. I strongly agree with the burning or throwing plastic bags are the basis of the pollution for pet animals and water creatures. I predict if the state announces the critical of the situation, it will save many lives.
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bags
are one of the main things that threatened the land and
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sea
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lives
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because
of pollution results, that
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people
should be
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prevented
from overconsumption. I
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agree
with this opinion
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because
it hurts the ground and
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sea
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lives
by firing or throwing the bags.

Firstly
, there is an immense toxic resulted from
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burning
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plastic
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bags
that are the main cause of death
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a lot of
inhabited
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animals
.
For example
, Egypt in 1987 the
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government
didn't take
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enough
aware of the effect of
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burning
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bags
.
Furthermore
, the citizens after using
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bags
gathered it and
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start
to burn in the streets.
As a result
, the pollution spread in the air and
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animals
smelled it.
However
,
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animals
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live
devastated. Although the huge amount of
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animals
passed away, the authority didn't
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make
any restrictions to protect the pet animals.

Secondly
, the marine life
is endangered
by
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plastic
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bags
; fishes and other
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sea
creatures swallow it with all the toxic and expired food inside it and after biodegrading of
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bags
the diseases spread among
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sea
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lives
.
Therefore
, illness
is distributed
among organism life.
For instance
, in the USA in 2000 passengers on the boat ate snacks and after that dropped the cover of snacks into the ocean
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so
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a lot of
fishes take it and after 10 years
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people
find an increase in the rate of
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died
fishes.

In conclusion
, leaving the
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bags
or
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burning
it, causes harm in the health of up and down souls. I
strongly
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agree
with the
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burning
or throwing
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plastic
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bags
are the basis of the pollution for pet
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animals
and water creatures. I predict if the state announces
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the critical of
the situation, it will save
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many
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lives
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay 2. Plastic shopping bags contribute to the pollution of land and sea, some think they should be banned. Give examples of your knowledge. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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