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2. Advantages and disadvantages of ONLINE SHOPPING

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It is believed that online shopping has become more and more popular in the society nowadays. While there are some advantages of this trend, I would argue that its disadvantages are more significant. Therefore, both positive and negative points are presented in this essay. On the one hand, the benefits of online shopping should not be underestimated. The first benefit is that online shopping saves me time and efforts when shopping. The second benefit is that I am comfortable comparing the price and quality of the product. The third benefit is that above all I avoid to buy unnecessary things such as do not have to face jostling, queue at rush hour at stores and avoid traffic jams, hot sun. . . . In short, there are several important benefits for online shopping. On the other hand, I support the view of those who believe that the disadvantages of online shopping outweigh the advantages. Firstly, once purchased, it will not be exchanged or returned. Secondly, there is a risk of exposing your credit card information when you pay at fraudulent websites. Thirdly, When choosing to shop online, buyers cannot check the quality of products, because of this, buyers are prone to buy fake, imitating and poor quality goods. In brief, there are some disadvantages of online shopping. In a nutshell, I would come up with the conclusion that despite the drawbacks of online shopping, I believe the benefits outweigh the disadvantages. It is suggested that the people individuals should balance both advantages and disadavantages of online shopping.
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is believed
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has become more and more popular in the society nowadays. While there are
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some
advantages of this trend, I would argue that its disadvantages are more significant.
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positive
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points
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in this essay.

On the one hand, the
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benefits
of
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should not
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. The
first
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benefit
is that
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online
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saves me time and efforts when
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. The second
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is that I am comfortable comparing the price and quality of the product.
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is that
above all
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unnecessary things such as do not
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face jostling, queue at rush hour at stores and avoid traffic jams, hot sun.
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In short, there are several
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important
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for
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shopping.

On the other hand
, I support the view of those who believe that the disadvantages of
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outweigh the advantages.
Firstly
, once
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purchased
, it will not
be exchanged
or returned.
Secondly
, there is a
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of exposing your credit card information when you pay at fraudulent websites.
Thirdly
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, buyers cannot
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the quality of products,
because of this
, buyers are prone to
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fake, imitating and poor quality
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goods
.
In brief
, there are
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some
disadvantages of
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shopping.

In a nutshell, I would
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come
up with the conclusion that despite the drawbacks of
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, I believe the
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benefits
outweigh the disadvantages. It
is suggested
that the
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people
individuals should balance both advantages and
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disadavantages
of
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online
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.
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IELTS essay 2. Advantages and disadvantages of ONLINE SHOPPING

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
5.5
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