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We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries.

Many people believe that we should help everyone in the world. However, I disagree with that because help should first start from the ones at home and it is difficult to know who exactly needs our help. Since the strength of a nation is measured by how supportive its people are to each other, those close to us are the ones who need most help. Concerning that, there are many options for those who want to help the ones in need. For example, local charity associations can raise money for the less fortunate, or people themselves simply have to ability to help their relatives, friends and whoever around them that seems needy.
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Since the strength of a nation
is measured
by how supportive its
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are to each other, those close to us are the ones who need most
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help
. Concerning that, there are
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many
options for those who want to
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help
the ones in need.
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, local charity associations can raise money for the less fortunate, or
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people
themselves
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their relatives, friends and whoever around them that seems needy.
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IELTS essay We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries.

Essay
  American English
2 paragraphs
112 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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