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1. When your members of family are out of station what do you do in your house2. What are the leisure activities of your parents3. Describe your house. v.1

1. When your members of family are out of station what do you do in your house2. What are the leisure activities of your parents3. Describe your house. v. 1
The hiring process is completely changed now from what it used to be in the past, and an interviewer asks a range of questions from both the personal and professional life. Some individuals think that the questions related to the personal life should not be asked, while others think, it may add value for a hearing person. We will discuss both the views before coming to a concrete conclusion. On the one hand, there is a plethora of jobs such as Reliability Engineer, Design and development coordinators, which requires critical thinking. Such jobs need not only academic background, but also the teamwork and patience. Therefore, it is essential for an interviewer to make a checklist of the questions which includes a variety of things to judge all the aspects of a candidate. Besides, it is easy to rate communication skills when someone is talking about his/her hobbies and other leisure activities. Moreover, there are several jobs, which needs particular skills – for instance, sales representative, and it gives an avenue to the hiring persons when they ask a wide range of questions because a salesperson will need confidence, communication and critical thinking. On the other hand, studies have shown that some forms include cast and religion, which is against the hiring standards and should not be asked in any circumstances. Furthermore, a hiring person should be more careful when they interview a female candidate because some women are not comfortable talking about their age and marital status. In conclusion, to see whether a person is intelligent enough to handle the work pressure, employers should ask the questions relates to both academic and social life, but they should not cross the limit while asking questions. .
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process is completely
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changed
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now
from what it
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used
to be in the past, and an interviewer asks a range of
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questions
from both the personal and professional life.
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Some
individuals
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think
that the
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questions
related to the personal life should not
be asked
, while others
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think
, it may
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add
value for a hearing
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person
. We will discuss both the views
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before
coming to a concrete conclusion.

On the one hand, there is a plethora of jobs such as Reliability Engineer, Design and development coordinators, which requires critical thinking. Such jobs need not
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only
academic background,
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but
also
the teamwork and patience.
Therefore
, it is essential for an interviewer to
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make
a checklist of the
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questions
which includes a variety of things to judge all the aspects of a candidate.
Besides
, it is easy to rate communication
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skills
when someone is talking about his/her hobbies and other leisure activities.
Moreover
, there are several jobs, which needs particular
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skills
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–
for instance
, sales representative, and it gives an avenue to the
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hiring
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persons
when they ask a wide range of
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questions
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because
a salesperson will need confidence, communication and critical thinking.

On the other hand
, studies have shown that
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some
forms include cast and religion, which is against the
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hiring
standards and should not
be asked
in any circumstances.
Furthermore
, a
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hiring
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person
should be more careful when they interview a female candidate
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because
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some
women are not comfortable talking about their age and marital status.

In conclusion
, to
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see
whether a
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person
is intelligent
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enough
to handle the work pressure, employers should ask the
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questions
relates to both academic and social life,
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but
they should not cross the limit while asking
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questions
.
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7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay 1. When your members of family are out of station what do you do in your house2. What are the leisure activities of your parents3. Describe your house. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
285 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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