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11. Describe a decision made by others that you disagreed with

11. Describe a decision made by others that you disagreed with K3OyN
We always have to make decisions. There will be decisions that everyone agrees on and some decisions that are not. I want to talk about some people who claim that homosexuality is a disease. But I disagree with that. I don't agree it's a disease. It's natural, but for some people it's unnatural. No medical organization has yet determined that homosexuality is a disease that needs to be treated. I know in the past people considered it a disease. What they do to homosexuals, which they see as healings, I see more like torture than cure. I don't agree with the way they treat gay people. They see homosexuality as something to keep them away from. Gay people are also human, they just differ from normal people in terms of sexual orientation. Now, the stigma of treating it as a disease is less but I just want to say that they are human too so please treat them like normal. Thanks for listening.
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decisions that are not. I want to talk about
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disease
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. What they do to homosexuals, which they
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homosexuality as something to
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people
in terms of sexual orientation.
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, the stigma of treating it as a
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disease
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want to say that they are human too
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treat them like normal. Thanks for listening.
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IELTS essay 11. Describe a decision made by others that you disagreed with

Essay
  American English
1 paragraphs
163 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 6.0
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