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1. Students should pay the full cost of their own university studies, rather than having free education provided by the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.4

1. Students should pay the full cost of their own university studies, rather than having free education provided by the state. with this opinion? v. 4
With an ever increasing demand of educated human resources, whether the fees for the tertiary education should be payable by students or by the state, is always a debatable matter among educationists. Some people think that it must be fully paid by the government, as it is a matter of success for any nation, whereas, others oppose it. However, I think that, students must pay their fees by themselves. The reasons of my inclination, are explained in trailed paragraphs. Firstly, students, who have already completed schooling and moving ahead for their tertiary education, are mature enough to earn as well as study together. Additionally, earning while studying, can inculcate several essential skills, such as time and money management. The pupils, who are studying by their own money, can have a better understanding of the value of money. For example, a recent survey, carried out by the Oxford university, has revealed that, the students, who are responsible to pay their own fees in the college, are more successful in their lives and they can evolve into better citizens of the nation. Secondly, there are some people in the country, who do not get a one-time meal, potable water and even the primary education, let alone the higher education. So, governments must spend money to provide the basic necessities to citizens, instead of spending for the college students. Although, the government can provide a certain types of loans and subsidies to the students, who are bright, but cannot afford because of the lack of funds. For instance, the developed countries, such as the UK and the US, have accepted that the reason behind their success is not spending money on university students, but it is, spending money on primary children. To conclude, as providing the university education is not the responsibility of the government, students must pay their fees by their own.
With an
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ever increasing
demand of educated human resources, whether the
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fees
for the tertiary
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education
should be payable by
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students
or by the state, is always a debatable matter among educationists.
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people
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think
that it
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must
be
fully
paid by the
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government
, as it is a matter of success for any nation, whereas, others oppose it.
However
, I
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think
that,
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students
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must
pay their
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fees
by themselves. The reasons of my inclination, are
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explained
in trailed paragraphs.

Firstly
,
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students
,
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who
have already completed schooling and moving ahead for their tertiary
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education
, are mature
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enough
to earn
as well
as study together.
Additionally
, earning while studying, can inculcate several essential
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skills
, such as time and
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money
management. The pupils,
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who
are studying by their
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own
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money
, can have a better understanding of the value of
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money
.
For example
, a recent survey, carried out by the Oxford university, has revealed that, the
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students
,
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who
are responsible to pay their
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own
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fees
in the college, are more successful in their
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lives and
they can evolve into better citizens of the nation.

Secondly
, there are
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some
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people
in the country,
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who
do not
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get
a one-time meal, potable water and even the primary
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education
,
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let
alone the higher
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education
.
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So
,
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governments
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must
spend
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money
to provide the
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basic necessities
to citizens,
instead
of spending for the college
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students
. Although, the
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government
can provide a certain types of loans and subsidies to the
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students
,
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who
are bright,
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but
cannot afford
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because
of the lack of funds.
For instance
, the
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developed countries
, such as the UK and the US, have
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accepted
that the reason behind their success is not spending
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money
on university
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students
,
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but
it is, spending
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money
on primary children.

To conclude
, as providing the university
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education
is not the responsibility of the
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government
,
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students
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must
pay their
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fees
by their
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own
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay 1. Students should pay the full cost of their own university studies, rather than having free education provided by the state. with this opinion? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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