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1. Students should pay the full cost of their own university studies, rather than having free education provided by the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? v.1

1. Students should pay the full cost of their own university studies, rather than having free education provided by the state. with this opinion? v. 1
It is often argued that the students are the ones who should entirely be responsible for their college fees and that the government should not be involved in this matter. I strongly disagree with this statement as I believe that the government does play a role in an indivdual's path to higher education for the following reasons. Firstly, not all children can afford to pay university fees because of their financial backgorund. In other words, there may be bright students who more than willing to attend university but because of acquiring less or no bank savings there dreams can be hindered. One of my friends, for example, was only able to save a very little amount of money through his part-time job to pay for his tuition fees. Ultimaltely, he had to drop out of college and give up on is bachelor's degree dream as he could not pay off the debt. This clearly could have been avoided if the government was invloved and had taken up the responsibility to pay off a talented student's educational dream. Secondly, we all know that college fees cost a lifetime. To be more specific, I strongly believe that a person's hard earned money should not be purely spent on his/her degree fees. For example, one of my cousins had only enough money to spend on her tuition fees that she had earned during her internship. Because of this reason, she hardly was able to take care of her daily expenses such as pay for rent, amenities, food etc. If the government had taken responsibility of her tuition fees, she would have been able to concentrate on her other expenses and she would not have been in a position to borrow money from her freinds. To summarize, I personally believe that it is the government's duty to take responsiblity of unfortunate students' degree fees as not everyone can afford college with their own savings and not all of one's savings should be spent on his/her college degree fees.
It is
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often
argued that the students are the ones who should
entirely
be responsible for their college
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fees
and that the
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government
should not
be involved
in this matter. I
strongly
disagree with this statement as I believe that the
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government
does play a role in an
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indivdual
's path to higher education for the following reasons.

Firstly
, not all children can afford to
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pay
university
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fees
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because
of their financial
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backgorund
.
In other words
, there may be bright students who more than willing to attend university
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but
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because
of acquiring less or no bank savings there dreams can
be hindered
. One of my friends,
for example
, was
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only
able to save a
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very
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little
amount of
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money
through his part-time job to
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pay
for his tuition
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fees
.
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Ultimaltely
, he had to drop out of college and give up on is bachelor's
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degree
dream as he could not
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pay
off the debt. This
clearly
could have
been avoided
if the
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government
was
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invloved
and had taken up the responsibility to
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pay
off a talented student's educational dream.

Secondly
, we all know that college
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fees
cost a lifetime. To be more specific, I
strongly
believe that a person's
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hard earned
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money
should not be
purely
spent on his/her
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degree
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fees
.
For example
, one of my cousins had
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only
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enough
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money
to spend on her tuition
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fees
that she had earned during her internship.
Because of this
reason, she
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hardly was
able to take care of her daily expenses such as
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pay
for rent, amenities, food etc. If the
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government
had taken responsibility of her tuition
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fees
, she would have been able to concentrate on her other
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expenses and
she would not have been in a position to borrow
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money
from her
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freinds
.

To summarize
, I
personally
believe that it is the
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government
's duty to take
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responsiblity
of unfortunate students'
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degree
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fees
as not everyone can afford college with their
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own
savings and not all of one's savings should
be spent
on his/her college
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degree
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fees
.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS essay 1. Students should pay the full cost of their own university studies, rather than having free education provided by the state. with this opinion? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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