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1. In Motortown, comment on two traumatic effects of the war observed in Danny when he returns home.

1. In Motortown, comment on two traumatic effects of the war observed in Danny when he returns home. YwdVj

He was a soldier and he came back from war with PTSD. The violence that he witnessed during the war continues in his behaviors back home. Because he cannot get over it. Therefore, he always wants to be in control and to achieve that he continuously manipulates people around him. There is violence against women from Danny’s side. He holds Marley’s arm very tightly, hurts her and also, he scares her with his letters. Jade, on the other hand, becomes the target of Danny’s physical abuse; Danny uses her instead of Marley because he cannot bring himself to kill Marley. He tortures Jade and then he kills her. Therefore, we see the theme of presence of violence not only in the warzone but also in civilian life. Danny is simply the stereotype of a traumatized man who comes back from the war and he is not healthy mentally.

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soldier and
 he came back from war with PTSD. The violence that he witnessed during the war continues in his behaviors back home. “Because” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Because
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get
 over it. Therefore
, he always wants to be in control and to achieve that he continuously
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people
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very
tightly
, hurts her and also
, he scares her with his letters. Jade, on the other hand
, becomes the target of Danny’s physical abuse; Danny This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploits
uses
 her instead
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because
 he cannot bring himself to kill Marley. He tortures Jade and then he kills her. Therefore
, we This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 the theme of presence of violence not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
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warzone
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but
also
 in civilian life. Danny is simply
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man
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 he is not healthy mentally. 