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1. Briefly describe the Program or Project including:

1. Briefly describe the Program or Project including: PVRQd
Currently, a hospital located in Melbourne is coping with high number of pacients, the executive manager and the stakeholders came up with the idea to expand the number of intensive unit care units. To do so, they seek for a biomedical engineer who will be in charge of running the whole project. The objetive of the project is to implement wider range of new technologies and a higher number of units within a year period for its completition, taking into account all the actual regulation in term of health system approaches and following the victoria health standards. They project also aims to be undertaken while still providing services to the community. The scope of this project is to achieve quality standards in order to provide a outstanding service for the community. Most of the hospitals in Melbourne provide a excellent services, therefore, the project aims to go beyond the current hospital performance. Also, this project is mean to be accessible for the whole community regardless social or econimic status. After assessing the required budget, the biomedical engineer and the project executive team determined $2 million for the project completition. This prices include all kind of expenses including payslips and project management plan. The resources involved include: a socioeconomical study in order to determine the community background where the hospital will develop. In term of human resource, a biomedical engineer with experience in unit care systems is required to design and stablish what equipment, techonology, biosecurity procedures need to be bought. Lastly, some specialists will work in conjuction with the engineers to provide a better approach for the project. In term of the new structure of the hospital, as more intensive cares will be built, the hospital will need extra space (land).
Currently
, a
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hospital
located in Melbourne is coping with high number of
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pacients
, the executive manager and the stakeholders came up with the
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idea
to expand the number of intensive
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unit
care
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units
. To do
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so
, they seek for a biomedical
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engineer
who will be in charge of running the whole project.

The
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objetive
of the
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project
is to implement wider range of new technologies and a higher number of
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units
within a year period for its
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completition
, taking into account all the actual regulation in term of health system approaches and following the
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victoria
health standards. They
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project
also
aims to be undertaken while
still
providing services to the community.

The scope of this
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project
is to achieve quality standards in order to provide
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a
outstanding service for the community. Most of the
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hospitals
in Melbourne provide
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a
excellent
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services
,
therefore
, the
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project
aims to go beyond the
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current
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hospital
performance.
Also
, this
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project
is mean to be accessible for the whole community regardless social or
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econimic
status.

After assessing the required budget, the biomedical
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engineer
and the
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project
executive team determined $2 million for the
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project
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completition
.
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This
prices include all kind of expenses including payslips and
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project
management plan.

The resources involved include: a
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socioeconomical
study in order to determine the community background where the
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hospital
will develop. In term of human resource, a biomedical
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engineer
with experience in
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unit
care systems
is required
to design and
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stablish
what equipment,
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techonology
,
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biosecurity
procedures need to be
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bought
.
Lastly
,
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some
specialists will work in
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conjuction
with the
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engineers
to provide a better approach for the
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project
. In term of the new structure of the
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hospital
, as more intensive cares will
be built
, the
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hospital
will need extra space (land).
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IELTS essay 1. Briefly describe the Program or Project including:

Essay
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5 paragraphs
291 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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