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Writing task 1 - The table below shows the results of a study into charitable giving around the world, conducted in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 50 words.

Writing task 1 - The table below shows the results of a study into charitable giving around the world, conducted in 2011. 0nJjG
The given table imparts information on the various countries' contribution for charity and volunteering at various organization in terms of money and time according to a study carried out in 2011. Overall, Thais' have spent more money for charity and Australians have spent more time in volunteering than any other country listed in the table. Whilst, in China, least number of people spent their time or money for any charitable trust or organization. Also the proportion of people spent money on charity was more than that of people volunteered their time. In regards to charity, Thailand came first with 73% of its population helping monetarily, whereas Australians and the people of Hong Kong held the second position 70% of their population contributing to charity. On the contrary, chainese have contributed the least, making up not even a fifth of what Thais or Australians had. The given table also depicted that South Koreans were not much interested either into charity and made up only 27% of the total contribution for charity. When it comes to volunteering, Australians seemed to volunteer the most amongst all the countries, where more than a third of the total Australians volunteered their precious time for an organization. Just over a fifth South Koreans devoted their time in volunteering, making it the second highest to do so. Although it was not as significant as Australian contribution, it was still considerable in comparison with the rest. People of Panama also showed the similar trend, where 21% population volunteered their time for social or community welfare. Surprisingly, Thais who have contributed the highest in terms money gave very little contribution in terms of time at an organization for a welfare of mankind.
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given
table imparts information on the various countries'
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contribution
for
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charity
and
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volunteering
at various
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organization
in terms of
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money
and
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time
according to a study carried out in 2011.
Overall
, Thais' have
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spent
more
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money
for
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charity
and Australians have
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spent
more
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time
in
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volunteering
than any other country listed in the table. Whilst, in China,
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least
number of
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people
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spent
their
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time
or
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money
for any charitable trust or
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organization
.
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Also
the proportion of
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people
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spent
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money
on
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charity
was more than that of
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people
volunteered their
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time
.
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charity
, Thailand came
first
with 73% of its population helping
monetarily
, whereas Australians and the
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people
of Hong Kong held the second position 70% of their population contributing to
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charity
.
On the contrary
,
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chainese
have contributed the least, making up not even a fifth of what Thais or Australians had. The
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table
also
depicted that South Koreans were not much interested either into
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charity
and made up
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only
27% of the total
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contribution
for
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charity
. When it
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comes
to
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volunteering
, Australians seemed to volunteer the most amongst all the countries, where more than a third of the total Australians volunteered their precious
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time
for an
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organization
.
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Just
over a fifth South
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Koreans
devoted their
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time
in
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volunteering
, making it the second highest to do
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so
. Although it was not as significant as Australian
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contribution
, it was
still
considerable
in comparison
with the rest.
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People
of Panama
also
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showed
the similar trend, where 21% population volunteered their
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time
for social or community welfare.
Surprisingly
, Thais who have contributed the highest in terms
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money
gave
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very
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little
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contribution
in terms of
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time
at an
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organization
for a welfare of mankind.
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IELTS academic Writing task 1 - The table below shows the results of a study into charitable giving around the world, conducted in 2011.

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