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The graph below demonstrate radio and TV viewers throughout the day in 1992.

The graph below demonstrate radio and TV viewers throughout the day in 1992. 7JM65

The graph below demonstrate radio and TV viewers throughout the day in 1992. Intially, 6 a. m TV audience were not any. On the contrary, by 8 p. m a number of people which watches a TV went up. Due to the fact that, at 8 p. m there are numerous films on start on a television. But, at 2 p. m there were not any kind of TV viewers. Because, at this time all human sleep at their home. In addition, at 4 p. m there are a few television viewers such as, a workers. At 6 a. m the spectaculars percent is rose up. At this time, all person eats their breakfast. According to the graph, initially at 6 o'clock a few people listen to the radio. This time they eat breakfast with listen to the radio. At 8 p. m less than a third humankind listen the music. As this time, they go to work by car. All knows there is a radio in the car. That is why, they listen to music. After that, the percent of listeners is went down. In fact that, another time all person has got their another activities. There are one in ten of changes of the graph. According to the graph, the TV showers are more than radio listeners. But, are 1 p. m all audiences are equal. In the graph shows all human addicted to TV rather than radio.

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