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WRITING TASK 1 You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. Summarise the graph by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

WRITING TASK 1 The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015. qKAd
Several people believe that have interested in your job is more important than the money you get while others think the salary is more important. The advantages when you like your job such as you won't feel boring when doing it for long. In the other hand, salary has the same priority. In my opinion, working when you like the job is more important. There are many advantages when you have interested in the job. As I was mentioned, I think the main benefit is you won't feel boring when you do it, therefore you can do it for maybe 10 years or longer. One plus is that when you have a passion for your job, you can earn a lot of money too. For instance, when you like to be a doctor you can do it for years and don't have to worry about the money. In the other hand, salary has the same important. No one wants to follow their passion and don't make any money. . Another advantage of having a high salary is you can live wealthy and don't have too many worries about how much money you earn. To illustrates, the CEO of a big company makes a lot of money and maybe that CEO doesn't have an interested in that job but he has the idea to make that company become better. To conclude, I think have a passion for the job is more important than how much money you will earn.
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IELTS academic WRITING TASK 1 The graph shows the number of visitors to four international museums between 1980 and 2015.

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
248 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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