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The first pie chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use .

The first pie chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. pkN9
The first given pie chart illustrate how the energy consumption is done in an average Australian household whereas, in the second pie chart represent the energy emissions of greenhouse gas. Overall, the Australian household has maximum used of heating it is nearly around half and the cooling percentage is very minute despite in the Australian household of greenhouse gas emissions of water heating has the leading percentage and the lowest percentage belongs to cooling. In the first pie chart the heating topped the energy used in Australian household it almost covered a half of its consumption then water heating acquired almost 30% of energy use. The other appliances is leading after the water heating with 15% the least three are refrigeration, lighting and cooling with 7%, 8%&2% respectively. On the other hand the greenhouse gas emissions the water heating covered almost 1/3 but other appliances is close to water heating these two has ranked highest household of gas emissions. The heating and refrigerator are almost same while the lighting has 8% and cooling count the least use household with 3%.
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IELTS academic The first pie chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

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