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The information regarding the monthly expenditure in year 2002 on distinct four cell phones in the european nation from January to September has depicted in the line graph At the first glance, in January most of the people spend money on demo cell phone that was exactly (€50). In contrast,Least money used on Alpha cell phone which was 5 euro. Demo cell phone increased minimally in March then, it dropped to €15 again in next month and in July it reached at €25 while, in September it goes down roughly. Alpha cell phones showed the least interest by people but after June it rose rapidly in last month reached at a peak €25 Looking at other, the cost of lex and Sin TX cell phone in January was above €10 and near €10 respectively Then, both were dropped in February and in the month of July both cuts each other. But, lex showed an upward trend and Sin TX experienced a downward trend. Lex was near 15 euro and sim Tx was near 5 euro. Overall, maximum money was spent by Europeans people on

The information regarding the monthly expenditure in year 2002 on distinct four cell phones in the european nation from January to September has depicted in the line graph At the first glance, in January most of the people spend money on demo cell phone that was exactly (€50). In contrast, Least money used on Alpha cell phone which was 5 euro. Demo cell phone increased minimally in March then, it dropped to €15 again in next month and in July it reached at €25 while, in September it goes down roughly. Alpha cell phones showed the least interest by people but after June it rose rapidly in last month reached at a peak €25 Looking at other, the cost of lex and Sin TX cell phone in January was above €10 and near €10 respectively Then, both were dropped in February and in the month of July both cuts each other. But, lex showed an upward trend and Sin TX experienced a downward trend. Lex was near 15 euro and sim Tx was near 5 euro. Overall, maximum money was spent by Europeans people on lEPX
The information regarding the monthly expenditure in year 2002 on distinct four cell phones in the european nation from January to September has depicted in the line graph At the first glance, in January most of the people spend money on demo cell phone that was exactly (€50). In contrast, Least money used on Alpha cell phone which was 5 euro. Demo cell phone increased minimally in March then, it dropped to €15 again in next month and in July it reached at €25 while, in September it goes down roughly. Alpha cell phones showed the least interest by people but after June it rose rapidly in last month reached at a peak €25 Looking at other, the cost of lex and Sin TX cell phone in January was above €10 and near €10 respectively Then, both were dropped in February and in the month of July both cuts each other. But, lex showed an upward trend and Sin TX experienced a downward trend. Lex was near 15 euro and sim Tx was near 5 euro. Overall, maximum money was spent by Europeans people on demo cell phone and least money was spent on alpha and Sim tax cell phone.
The information regarding the monthly expenditure in year 2002 on distinct four
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in the
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nation from January to September has depicted in the line graph

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first
glance, in January most of the
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people
spend
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money
on demo
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cell
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phone
that was exactly (€50).
In contrast
,
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Least
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money
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used
on Alpha
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cell
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phone
which was 5
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euro
. Demo
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phone
increased
minimally
in March then, it dropped to €15 again in
next
month and in July it reached at €25 while, in September it goes down roughly. Alpha
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showed
the least
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after June it rose
rapidly
in last month reached at a peak €25

Looking at other, the cost of
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lex
and Sin TX
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in January was above €10 and near €10
respectively
Then, both
were dropped
in February and in the month of July both
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cuts
each other.
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But
,
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lex
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showed
an upward trend and Sin TX experienced a downward trend.
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Lex
was near 15
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euro
and sim
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Tx
was near 5
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euro
.

Overall
, maximum
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money
was spent
by Europeans
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people
on demo
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cell
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phone
and least
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money
was spent
on alpha and Sim tax
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cell
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phone
.
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IELTS academic The information regarding the monthly expenditure in year 2002 on distinct four cell phones in the european nation from January to September has depicted in the line graph At the first glance, in January most of the people spend money on demo cell phone that was exactly (€50). In contrast, Least money used on Alpha cell phone which was 5 euro. Demo cell phone increased minimally in March then, it dropped to €15 again in next month and in July it reached at €25 while, in September it goes down roughly. Alpha cell phones showed the least interest by people but after June it rose rapidly in last month reached at a peak €25 Looking at other, the cost of lex and Sin TX cell phone in January was above €10 and near €10 respectively Then, both were dropped in February and in the month of July both cuts each other. But, lex showed an upward trend and Sin TX experienced a downward trend. Lex was near 15 euro and sim Tx was near 5 euro. Overall, maximum money was spent by Europeans people on

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