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A glance at the line graph provided reveals the amount of buyers in four restaurants in the period during 1990 and 2015.

A glance at the line graph provided reveals the amount of buyers in four restaurants in the period during 1990 and 2015. BeDp
A glance at the line graph provided reveals the amount of buyers in four restaurants in the period during 1990 and 2015. Overall, it is evident that although Pizza Hut was the most popular among customers, the attendance of this restaurant and Chicken Spot fell steadily over the given period. Meanwhile, there were significant rises in the number of customers in Donut Bro and Burger Bar. In 1990, the most visited place was Pizza Hut, which accounted for 8 thousands customers. The next frequently attended place was Chicken Spot, with around 6 thousands buyers, which was almost double of the amount of customers in Burger Bar. The attendance decreased slightly in Pizza Hut over the next 25 years, however, despite a surge in the 2000th, the number of customers in Chicken Spot dropped dramatically until by 2015 and accounted for a mere about 3 thousands. By contrast, after 1990, the number of visitors increased significantly in Burger Bar and Donut Bro. By the end of the period, Donut Bro was the most visited restaurant with 8 thousands customers.
A glance at the line graph provided reveals the amount of buyers in four restaurants in the period during 1990 and 2015.

Overall
, it is evident that although Pizza Hut was the most popular among
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customers
, the attendance of this restaurant and Chicken Spot fell
steadily
over the
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period. Meanwhile, there were significant rises in the number of
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customers
in
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Donut
Bro and Burger Bar.

In 1990, the most visited place was Pizza Hut, which accounted for 8 thousands
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customers
. The
next
frequently
attended place was Chicken Spot, with around 6 thousands buyers, which was almost double of the amount of
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customers
in Burger Bar. The attendance decreased
slightly
in Pizza Hut over the
next
25 years,
however
, despite a surge in the 2000th, the number of
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customers
in Chicken Spot dropped
dramatically
until by 2015 and accounted for a mere about 3 thousands.

By contrast, after 1990, the number of visitors increased
significantly
in Burger Bar and
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Donut
Bro. By the
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end
of the period,
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Donut
Bro was the most visited restaurant with 8 thousands
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customers
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IELTS academic A glance at the line graph provided reveals the amount of buyers in four restaurants in the period during 1990 and 2015.

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