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The table illustrate the rate of deaths in Someland from various diseases such as AIDS, Leprocy, Tropical diseases, Diarrhoea, Malaria and TB, also shows medical research funding for that diseases for the same country in the year 1990. Numbers are given in millions. Overall, it is immediately seen that highest ratio of death in Someland was because of TB, whereas leprosy was the least. Moreover, AIDS shows the most research funding in compare to all other disease. The death rate in Someland in year 1990 for the reason of AIDS and leprosy was. 2 and. 1 million respectively. Tropical disease and Malaria’s rate of death was almost same with. 1 million of difference. Dairrhoea occupied 0. 5 millions of deaths in Someland, whereas TB accounted for more than 1. 5 million. In Someland, almost 180 millions spent on medical research for AIDS, which was at the top. Researchers spent 80 millions on leprosy and tropical disease. Diarrhoea and malaria has 60 millions and 50 millions expenditures by scientist. TB has lowest research funding of 20 millions.
The table
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the rate of deaths in
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Someland
from various
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diseases
such as
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AIDS
,
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Leprocy
, Tropical
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diseases
,
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Diarrhoea
, Malaria and TB,
also
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shows
medical
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research
funding for that
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diseases
for the same country in the year 1990. Numbers are
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given
in millions.

Overall
, it is immediately
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seen
that highest ratio of death in
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Someland
was
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because
of TB, whereas leprosy was the least.
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,
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AIDS
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shows
the most
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research
funding in compare to all other disease.

The death rate in
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Someland
in year 1990 for the reason of
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AIDS
and leprosy was. 2 and. 1
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million
respectively
. Tropical
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disease
and Malaria’s rate of death was almost same with. 1
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million
of difference.
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Dairrhoea
occupied 0. 5
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millions
of deaths in
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Someland
, whereas TB accounted for more than 1. 5 million.

In
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Someland
, almost 180
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millions
spent on medical
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research
for
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AIDS
, which was at the top. Researchers spent 80
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millions
on leprosy and tropical
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disease
.
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Diarrhoea
and malaria has 60
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millions
and 50
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millions
expenditures by scientist. TB has
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lowest
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research
funding of 20
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millions
.
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