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The pie chart depict world, projected production by sector between 2040 and 2060 which is services, manufacturing, materials, energy, agriculture, and info-com tech. Overall, the most level of pie charts between two years is services and manufacturing while info-com tech between two year is quite the same. Moreover, the totally of materials, energy, and agriculture is a bit contrasting between two years. First, even though services are the most level between two charts but services in 2040 is fewer than 2060 for 1 percent even it is not much like info-com tech. Moreover, the second level between two charts as manufacturing in year 2060 is higher than 2040 for 3 percent. Following that, the amount number of materials, energy, and agriculture in 2060 is lower than 2040 for 4 percent. Furthermore, info- com tech between two years is quite equal but in year 2060 is more than 2040 for 1 percent as services.
The pie
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depict world, projected production by sector between 2040 and 2060 which is
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services
, manufacturing, materials, energy, agriculture, and info-com tech.

Overall
, the most level of pie
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charts
between two years is
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services
and manufacturing while info-com tech between two
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is quite the same.
Moreover
, the
totally
of materials, energy, and agriculture is a bit contrasting between two years.

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services
are the most level between two
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charts
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but
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in 2040 is fewer than 2060 for 1 percent even it is not much like info-com tech.
Moreover
, the second level between two
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as manufacturing in
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2060 is higher than 2040 for 3 percent.

Following that, the amount number of materials, energy, and agriculture in 2060 is lower than 2040 for 4 percent.
Furthermore
, info- com tech between two years is quite equal
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in
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2060 is more than 2040 for 1 percent as
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IELTS academic world, projected production by sector

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