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World oil production 1960-2000

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The given line graph depicts the information about the oil manufacture over four different part of the globe namely Middle East, Africa, North America and Asia from 1960 to 2000. The data has been calibrated in millions barrels per day. From an overall perspective, it can be vividly manifested that an upward trend was noticed in Middle East as well as North America and Asia, whereas the fluctuations trend of oil production in the Africa. To begin with, In Middle East, there were Slightly increased of oil making between 1960 and 1970, then after dramatically rise and reached its peak of more than thirty million in 1980. After that, the quickly changes in oil production and reached a platue around at 41 millions and more than a half millions from 1990 and 2000 respectively. In 1960, there was sharply increased in oil manufacturing in 1970 and it was accounted at 30 millions. After tremendously a plunge in 1980 of approximately at 21 millions. Between 1990 and 2000, there was merely boom around at 35 millions and 40 millions respectively. Moving towards the rest of the information, In the North America, there was steeply growth of oil production from 1960 to 1980, and it was accounted nearly at 30 millions barrels per day, then there had gradual rise over the thirty years period and a levelling of at 33 millions. In 1960, the production of oil were slowly an upward trend to 1980 of at more than 10 millions. Between 1990 and 2000, the manufacturing of oil steadily surge and it was accounted at 20%.
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line graph depicts the information about the
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manufacture over four
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different
part of the globe
namely
Middle East, Africa, North America and Asia from 1960 to 2000. The data has
been calibrated
in
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millions
barrels per day. From an
overall
perspective, it can be
vividly
manifested that an upward trend
was noticed
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in Middle East
as well
as North America and Asia, whereas the fluctuations trend of
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oil
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production
in the Africa. To
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begin
with,
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In Middle East
, there were
Slightly
increased of
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oil
making between 1960 and 1970, then after
dramatically
rise and reached its peak of more than thirty
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million
in 1980. After that, the
quickly
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changes
in
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oil
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production
and reached a
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platue
around at 41
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millions
and more than a half
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millions
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from 1990 and 2000
respectively
. In 1960, there was
sharply
increased in
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oil
manufacturing in 1970 and it
was accounted
at 30
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millions
.
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After
tremendously
a plunge in 1980 of approximately at 21
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millions
. Between 1990 and 2000, there was
merely
boom around at 35
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millions
and 40
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millions
respectively
. Moving towards the rest of the information, In the North America, there was
steeply
growth of
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oil
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production
from 1960 to 1980, and it
was accounted
nearly
at 30
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millions
barrels per day, then there had gradual rise over the thirty years period and a levelling of at 33
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millions
. In 1960, the
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production
of
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oil
were
slowly
an upward trend to 1980 of at more than 10
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millions
. Between 1990 and 2000, the manufacturing of
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oil
steadily
surge and it
was accounted
at 20%.
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