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Demand for electricity in England during winter and summer

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The graph shows electricity requirements, during a typical day of winter and summer, as well as the usage of it. It is evident the needs for electricity in both winter and summer periods are substantially changing. In the winter period, the usage of electricity increased rapidly to 40000 units. After this, it dipped dramatically to 30000 units. Moreover, in the evening time, it is steadily rising to the peak point. While in summer, it rose to 20000 units in the noontime, and in the evening, it dropped to 16000 units. In wintertime, the usage of electricity sharply increases from 20 o'clock to 22 o'clock, when in summer it is gradually rising from 13 o'clock to 15 o'clock. In addition, it is also noticeable that the utilization of electricity in both winter and summer from 6 o'clock to 9 o'clock is significantly different from other hours.
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requirements, during a typical day of
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,
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in both
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and
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periods are
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In the
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period, the usage of
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increased
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. After this, it dipped
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to 30000
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Moreover
, in the evening time, it is
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rising to the peak point.

While in
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, it rose to 20000
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in the noontime, and in the evening, it dropped to 16000
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. In wintertime, the usage of
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sharply
increases from 20
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to 22
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, when in
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it is
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to 15
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from 6
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IELTS academic Demand for electricity in England during winter and summer

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