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The diagram shows the process of making pencils

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The diagram depicts the process of pencil production. The process consist of several stages starting with the growing of plant and ending with painting, sharpening and stamping. In the initial stage of process plants are grown and after 4 months they are replanted to another place for better space. In the second stage after three years trees are thinned for better quality thereafter when trees are became mature after 14 years they are cut down for further process. In the subsequent step, trees that are cut down are converted into thin slats by machines in factory and these slats are treated with certain types of chemicals to protect them, after 60 days of treatment the slats are grooved in filled with glue and block lead, thereafter a plane sheet is placed on the grooved sheet just like sandwich, in order to make pencil, then these both slats are hard pressed with heat and are ready cutting. Last but not least, from these slats one by one pencils are cut down and are ready to paint, sharp, and stamped. After this process, finally they are delivered to the local markets.
The diagram depicts the
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process
of pencil production. The
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process
consist of several stages starting with the growing of plant and ending with painting, sharpening and stamping.

In the initial stage of
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process
plants
are grown
and after 4 months they
are replanted
to another place for better space. In the second stage after three years trees
are thinned
for better quality thereafter when trees are
Consider using a past participle here: "become".
became
mature after 14 years they are
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cut
down for
further
process.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
In
the subsequent step, trees that are
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cut
down
are converted
into thin
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slats
by machines in factory and these
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slats
are treated
with certain types of chemicals to protect them, after 60 days of treatment the
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slats
are grooved
in filled with glue and block lead, thereafter a
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plane
sheet
is placed
on the grooved sheet
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just
like sandwich, in order to
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make
pencil, then these both
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slats
are
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
hard pressed
with heat and are ready cutting. Last
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but
not least, from these
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slats
one by
Don't use the number 'one' with plural words. Did you mean "one pencil", "a pencil", or simply "pencils"?
one pencils
are
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cut
down and are ready to paint, sharp, and stamped. After this
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process
,
finally
they
are delivered
to the local markets.

IELTS academic The diagram shows the process of making pencils

Academic
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3 paragraphs
189 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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