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winter and summer Olympics game

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The bar chart and graph illustrate the most medal winner countries in both summer and winter Olympics. The bar chart is ranked among the top 5 medal winner countries diving by the type of medal. Overall, in winter games, Norway is in lead in number of medals earned, which won almost 300 medals. While in summer Olympics USA with almost 1. 500 more medal earned stands out. Countries that are the best in winter games includes Norway, USA, Germany, USSR and Canada. Norway reached the most number of medals in winter Olympic games and USA with a slightly amount less than that, stands in second place. Canada won approximately 150 medal and is in fifth place. Regarding the summer Olympics, the first place is USA with over 2500 number of medals and other 4 countries have significantly lower number of medals. Great Britain, Germany and France with reaching less than 1000 number are in third to fifth place respectively
The bar chart and graph illustrate the most
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winner countries in both summer and
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winter
Olympics. The bar chart
is ranked
among the top 5
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medal
winner countries diving by the type of medal.

Overall
, in
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winter
games, Norway is in lead in
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number
of
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medals
earned, which won almost 300
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.
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in summer Olympics USA with almost 1. 500 more
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medal
earned stands out.

Countries that are the best in
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winter
games includes Norway, USA, Germany, USSR and Canada. Norway reached the most
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number
of
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medals
in
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winter
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Olympic games
and USA with a
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less than that, stands in second place. Canada won approximately 150
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and is in fifth place.

Regarding the summer Olympics, the
first
place is USA with over 2500
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number
of
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medals
and other 4 countries have
significantly
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lower
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number
of
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medals
. Great Britain, Germany and France with reaching less than 1000
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are in third to fifth place
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respectively
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IELTS academic winter and summer Olympics game

Academic
  American English
4 paragraphs
158 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
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