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The maps depict the changes of the area named Harrison’s Stables in 1920 and 2010.

The maps depict the changes of the area named Harrison’s Stables in 1920 and 2010. qkmnD
The maps depict the changes of the area named Harrison’s Stables in 1920 and 2010. From the maps, the first impressions were seen in the extension of Stables, and the demolition of Main House to make room for Car Park. It is also notable that Field was completely cleared. In 1920, the Main House lying to the northwest of the map was twice as big as Cottages which was located to the north of the map. Over the next 90 years, the two zones were converted into Car Park. In addition, a Train Line was erected behind the park. Also, Barm and the right part of Riding Path were replaced by Office Block. As can be observed, the Riding Path and Fence were relocated. The old ones (1920) were constructed in a straight line, which diviced the town into 2 areas, while the new ones (2010) were built opposite the Official Block. These changes made Field become non-existed. Additionally, the Stables situated to the southeast of the map was double in size, which took the largest space.
The
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depict the
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of the area named Harrison’s Stables in 1920 and 2010.

From the
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maps
, the
first
impressions were
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seen
in the extension of Stables, and the demolition of Main
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House
to
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make
room for Car Park. It is
also
notable that Field was completely cleared.

In 1920, the Main
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House
lying to the northwest of the
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map
was twice as
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big
as Cottages which
was located
to the north of the
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map
. Over the
next
90 years, the two zones
were converted
into Car Park.
In addition
, a Train Line
was erected
behind the park.
Also
,
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Barm
and the right part of Riding Path
were replaced
by Office Block.

As can
be observed
, the Riding Path and Fence
were relocated
. The
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old
ones (1920)
were constructed
in a straight line, which
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diviced
the town into 2 areas, while the new ones (2010)
were built
opposite the Official Block. These
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changes
made Field become non-existed.
Additionally
, the Stables situated to the southeast of the
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map
was
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double in size
, which took the largest space.
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IELTS academic The maps depict the changes of the area named Harrison’s Stables in 1920 and 2010.

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