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Weight issue for Charlestown in 1955 and 2015

Weight issue for Charlestown in 1955 and 2015 Mq5W6

A glance at the graph gives information about weight issue of people lived in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015 Looking from all prospective readily apparent that the percent of obesity at the different ages took upward trajectory, while the others had comparatively small increased at the given period. Breaking that down further, the percent of obese people is increasing by almost the half when they get older in 2015 compared to the small changing in 1955 Although the proportion of ideal weight constituting of 50% of elder people in 1955, this percent declined substantially to reach at approximately 5% merely. Likewise, the percent of other ages decease marginally, except of young people which remained almost steady over the period. Similarity, it can be seen the overweight percentage is grew at different ages except for 50-59 ages which witnessed a marginal decreasing from 10% to approximately 5%. However, in 1955 the ratio of underweight represent the third compared to 20% of 20-29 ages, while it can be noticed the decreasing of underweight rate in older generation in 2015. It is clear that there has been significant increasing in the number of obese people In Charlestown, and there was general drop in the number of underweight people between 1955-2015

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people
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lived
 in Charlestown in 1955 and 2015

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ages
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.

Likewise
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except for
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ages
 which witnessed a marginal decreasing from 10% to approximately 5%.

However
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, while it can be noticed
 the decreasing of underweight rate in older generation in 2015.

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clear
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people
 In Charlestown, and there was general drop in the number of underweight You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcrowdfamilycommunitynationsocietypublic
people
 between 1955-2015